What a sad story you have told here. The flow was good and the rhyming wasn't forced, so that's a plus! What makes it even sadder is the fact that there are mentally ill people who have done this and others who will in the future.....
OMG HOLLY my fave this one i loved it your so descriptive with your words and this is one of your best! I think the message your putting out is really good too - these sort of situations happen for real in real life and if society and the people around these kinds of people were more aware and educated on the issue then perhaps future incidents similar to the one you wrote about could be avoided. WELL DONE ONCE MORE :o)
Wow Holly. Simply stunning piece of poetry. Absolutely magnificent. A very well written piece; described the event with such detail that the reader can actually visualize the scene. I liked the flow and wording of this poem. Thank you for sharing such a brilliant work of art. Keep up the wonderful work and take care!
Kind regards, Kristina