My Crimson Demise

by HOLLY ARMER   Mar 1, 2012


I feel your eyes
watching my chest
rise and fall with breath

Creating a fury
that clashes against
the stillness of you

Suddenly ivory fangs
hover above my
racing pulse in desire

With the charm
of a thousand gentiles
I am enraptured

Caught up in moments
that will pen my demise
in the smear of crimson

upon your quivering lips ....

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  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    Holly*

    This is such an eerie, creepy poem! I really like how you wrote of vampires in their dark and creepy way that they really should be. While I really like the Twilight books/movies, I can't help but feel they've been ... girlied up a little? Vampires have always been dark, mysteriously looming in the shadows and seductive to beautiful women, but they also generally kill these women, not marry them and turn them into vampires and have babies. lol.

    I think the use of crimson in the title is a little cliche, and to be honest I thought this was going to be a self harm poem by the title, so it was a lot deceiving. I eye-roll at self harm poems so I was wondering what you were doing, haha! But you crafted this dark poem in a scary but beautifully poetic way - I really enjoyed this read!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    Loved the atmpospher of this piece. I liked how you set the poem out and how you told the story.

    Excellent write

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    So holly, I don't usually read dark poetry, but I love ur work ! So I read this and found myself quit enjoying it :) I was really captivated by the tone and the words..I loved the part about the fangs hovering...super intriguing and kinda creepy!

    Quivering lips <-- favorite two words put together :)

    Loved it