Comments : Broken World

  • 6 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    "I dont want anyone to see, what love has done to me."

    I loved the poem as a whole but the above line really spoke to me as too many times in life love changes us and its hard for us to want to let people in to see those changes

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    I can really relate to this
    i can tell so much emotion and thought went into this aswel

    "I cant heal my own broken world, when im losing hope."

    was my fav line

    though a little short, it was pure gold in my eyes
    wouldnt change a thing

    another 5/5 from me

  • 6 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    There were some really good parts to this, especially the ending, you gave me chills when I read this as it was so sad yet serene at the same time, a very nice piece

    Love
    Tara
    xxx

  • 6 years ago

    by L

    Great piece. So much emotion into it. I really like it.

  • 6 years ago

    by Matthew Schut

    Wow, I love it!

    I've never been accepted, I always had to pretend.

    I just want this fake reality, to just end.

    I think we can all relate to this at some point in our lives! You have put a beautiful poem together here! Good work my friend!

  • 6 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Soo sad! :)

    I just have few minor things...

    im = I'm

    -these grammatical errors always are annoying, I make such mistakes all the time...a bit of attention would help ;)

    good write, Jessie

  • 6 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    "I guess im use to this, use to fealing alone"

    This line should be revised. I would suggest

    " I guess i'm used to this, used to feeling alone"

    But overall a great poem that had my attention from the very beginning.
    a solid 5 from me.

  • 6 years ago

    by charles

    I can relate to this also. Many times love has changed me, for the good or bad. Many times ive had to hide whats inside. Yet through it all, it made me stronger and more complete. 5 of 5!

  • 6 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    Wow this poem is so great! it has a lot of emotion i can relate to and i'm sure others can too. my favorite part was I just want this fake reality, to just end, i think this line is something a lot of people feel as well. well done 5/5 ^.^

  • 6 years ago

    by Zemotion

    Personally i dont like the flow much, but i like the emotion and meaning behind it. ^_^

  • 6 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    I liked it. You dont a great job and the poem was great. I could relate to it perfectly, and the poem its self is just amazing.. 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Dezi

    I absolutely loved this poem it's going on my favorites because i can really relate to it at this time of my life.

  • 6 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    Oh, the sad emotion. :( I understand it though. You worded it perfectly.
    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Renegade Angel

    The flow was good, i liked this a lot. keep it up!

  • 6 years ago

    by Amreen

    I have always been through your poems especially the sad ones or about life and not a surprise for me that they say and teach a lot....!!
    very well brought up emotions and life will indeed bring the sunshine of happiness in lives dulled with shades of grey and despair....!!!

    good work hun...:))