Comments : Deprivation

  • 6 years ago

    by Meme

    I LOOOOOOOOOOOVE IT!
    Thats exactly how I feel, I always tell my friends that I am in love with my bed :P

    Every single person on earth can relate to this piece.

    Well done.

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Hhaha fabulousssssss brilliant, amazing, this is CLAPS for you! this should be nominated, super creative, i agree with me, wow i love my bed too! I love you as well, and I love this poem, I have no idea why, but this poem cheered the hell out of me.. maybe its obvious Lol.

    Love it, well done!! very different my loving pinkyprincess

  • 6 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    I am enveloped in safety and security,
    as though nothing can harm me,
    and even when I fall asleep,
    I'm dancing in an enchanting dream.

    this was my favorite stanza.
    As i began to read, i pictured you expressing your love, how he makes you feel, how comfortable and secure you feel around him...and then i got to last stanza and i was surprised and amazed..such creativity..wonderful poem

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    OMG!!!!
    Im gonna kill you :P lol kidding
    hahhahahahha.. I dissolved in the whole atmosphere.. thought it's love..
    until: BED?
    Amazing idea !! love it, going into my favorites!!
    cant say moreee:P

  • 6 years ago

    by Lioness

    WOW

    This poem is fantastic.

    I love that you put it in the poems about life as if it was in the love section it may have not made sense lol

    I think the ending is brilliant.

    Here I was thinking awww how sweet.

    In the end I just felt like going back to my own bed and getting more rest lol

    Well done with this poem. I simply loved it

    x

  • Mwahahaha! Oh Sara... This is like the long dentist joke you get in an e-mail that everyone assumes is one of the most perverted things ever written!

    Brilliantly written, dear.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 6 years ago

    by Jon914

    Nice

  • 6 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I started reading and thought this is a beautiful love poem, the kind that everyone wants. Being loved no matter what you look like.
    Then I got to the end ;-) absolute the most creative in a while LOL
    awesome

  • 5 years ago

    by Matthew Schut

    Awwwwwwwwwww I LOVE THE twist at the end!!! My kind of poem right there! :) hehe!!! :) Good job my friend! keep it up!!! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Hollow Face

    I love it! I miss my bed too! I had to break up with it this morning. Good wording and a fun poem.
    5/5
    ~Kitty

  • 5 years ago

    by XxLastHopexX

    You spelled pajamas wrong, which distracted me a little bit. Other than that this was very well written. I especially like the last stanza:
    Oh, how I love -
    being wrapped in your Egyptian cotton sheets,
    and soft goose-feathered pillows...
    You are my one and only,
    .......My loving bed

    It's beautifully written.

  • 5 years ago

    by Girl of Conviction

    Lol tooo cute! didnt see it coming that it was about your bed :]] love it

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    I loved this Good job.!

  • I long for you - day and night,
    missing your warm embrace,
    in need of your constant comfort
    and your supportive feather wings.

    ^^
    Here it seemed as though you were stating your loved one was somewhat of an angel - implying perfection. That you couldn't live without them.

    I can be my absolute self around you.
    You make me feel beautiful even when
    I'm laying in my mismatched pyjamas,
    without a hint of make-up on my face.

    ^^
    Every girl dreams to be accepted for exactly as they are. No frills necessary. (:

    I am enveloped in safety and security,
    as though nothing can harm me,
    and even when I fall asleep,
    I'm dancing in an enchanting dream.

    ^^
    A sense of safety is something we all have the right to feel. When we feel it we tend to cherish it.

    You understand when I'm busy,
    but still welcome me with open arms.
    Nothing can compare to you because
    you were custom made for me.

    ^^
    Custom made? something of a soul-mate type here?
    We all have our separate lives and others must respect that.

    Oh, how I love -
    being wrapped in your Egyptian cotton sheets,
    and soft goose-feathered pillows...
    You are my one and only,
    .......My loving bed

    ^^
    HAHA!! I LOVE THIS ENDING!
    It was completely unexpected!
    Plus makes me want to crawl into bed right now! lol. I love my bed also. (:
    _______________________________
    OVERALL;
    I wish I had analysed this poem as I was reading it through. (Sometimes I do, sometimes I don't. ) Anyway, I had to go back with the knowledge of the ending and write down what my first impression of each stanza had been, lol. That ending was COMPLETELY unexepected! TOTALLY cute and loveable! It's not often when I'm caught by surprise by an ending, so it just made me love it more. And I can totally agree with everything you said above. Perfect. I'd nominate this if I could - a true GEM.

    Your flow was SPOT ON.
    The imagery AMAZING!
    Description GREAT!
    Ending: KILLER! Blowed all competition out of the ball park. lol

    This one HAS to be added to my favourites!
    5/5