Again so short but so marvelous. Theres so much description, emotion and meaning behind every word, how do you do it? I am amazed by you and just about everything you write. I mean most people can relate in some way to all of them or gain something (laughter included) from each one, and they are so descriptive. Ok maybe I should stop now and say that this piece is stunning and you have yet again penned pure excellence.

The sadness can be felt in this powerful piece TJ... you are so expressive within your pieces that the reader can't help but feel .... a very touching poem...

TJ,

Oh how this describes so many times I have felt like this.
So much sadness and anger in this poem. There are different emotions.

When you feel like this you can feel so overwhelmed.

Well done TJ!

x

Shattered heart.. Probably many can relate to this piece.

The poem describes a way of how a heart can be shattered and how one feels when it's in that condition.

This piece here depicts the sorrow felt by a guilty one, but also the pain experienced by the innocent victim. A heart contrite and full of regret can often break itself. There's no end to the tears as your mind dwells on the events leading up to the crash. Each person's pain is unique to them and them alone. But I think a lot of people can relate to this. Well done

Short but powerful poem. I like the way it flows and I have to admit that your words really captivated me though the emotions in the poem as well as those revealed, because of it, made it even more touching.

This is amazing and great but sad excellently written as always by an amazing poet like u and I here for u always and hope things r ok but loved the poem its fantastic 5/5

Bro, this piece is short, and powerful. The simplicity of this poem is astounding. The composition consists of straight forward interpretation. The message is conveyed very well.

And as for the personal turmoil. As humans we betray, get betrayed, etc. Life is made up of such events, it is what constitutes for human experience you know, displaying love, and mercy, getting angry, upset and more.

Good job bro.

A powerful masterpiece !
they've already said it all
well done 5/5

TJ, though I would ask you is there something wrong? ... it seems that your tone is so weary and dripping with melancholy..

but I would like also to say that you made an amazing job with your portrayal of emotions within this tiny piece. I so damn love it... felt so attached to it in so many aspects. How strange it is when I feel connected to pieces like this. amazing.

There truely is nothing positive about the fallout of a relationship of any kind especially over lies. Being lied to is such an annoying thing to go through it makes one think "do you think that low of me you cant tell me the truth"..

I know those situations suck, but like many have said you have took a sad, dreary situation and turned it into a very well written poem. Keep writing, it helps!
Chelsey

Let me bow to my king again. Powerful piece TJ. People often hurt us or we hurt them.Life is an insolit game. It is hard to play it and it is hard not to take part in it.But we have to go ahead no matter how hurt we are. Great write.

You are so versatile as a writer . ..brilliant piece !

To be honest, I'm not really crazy about most of this, because you use the "passive voice" rather than the "active voice" which makes it difficult for the reader to connect with the words and to feel sympathy for the writer.

The last two lines, however, are real gems, and if you could match their brilliance in the other lines, you would have a real showpiece.

I thought it was written very well such a powerful piece the last two lines underline the whole poem awesome write

Depressed! Suppressed!! Oppressed!!!OMG...just to mention but a few.. I just wonder WHY??? Whatever has happened, are sharpevilled to victory @ LAST..for it takes fermentation to extract the right brew out of Wheat! However, Thanks for sharing this heart-felt piece.

This made my heart hurt and brought back memories of the times I felt like this. You captured the emotions and feelings that a person goes through when their hearts are broken by another. Not something I wish to experience again. Well done.

Yes..this does bring back memories of long ago which I don't want to remember and the pain that grew with it. As sad as it is I also find this write strong with anger arising from scars.

The words convey sadness despairing. Anger rampaging through the short poem with powerful words. I agree with Kiko you spoke but didn't show the emotions showering through the piece. With a 'lil tweak, this poem will really SHATTER minds with eloquence creatively portrayed. Amazing TJ, always on point.

The words convey sadness despairing. Anger rampaging through the short poem with powerful words. I agree with Kiko you spoke but didn't show the emotions showering through the piece. With a 'lil tweak, this poem will really SHATTER minds with eloquence creatively portrayed. Amazing TJ, always on point.