nicely opening line for this type of poem, I loved the flow of it and the scenery it painted in my mind, it was a beautiful piece. . . . . and definitly you wrote a fitting title too, it was Nicely penned. good job. on this poem. . . . . . keep it up
I just felt the beauty of summer, I usually think of summer as sweat, sea or maybe ice cream, haha, but never have I thought of it as mellow grass and a warming sun. This gave me so much to love! Your use of words left me speechless. The way you such beautiful things in a normal scene is undescribible. I love the sun and breeze image, really felt like a warm wind playing with my hair as I walk on the grass with my bare feet, so dreamy and elegant!
skip along a
I am one bad writer when it comes to nature, though I always love to read poems about nature and such, especially with such simple wording and queer imagery. I am just inawe over this whole write, really really loved it. I just have one suggestion here I would say 'skipping' instead. Read it out loud and see what's more fitting. :)
Amazingly written, lovely!
5 years ago
I love poems that have numbers :)
And this... is so exuberant.. filled with peace.. and colors.. and sounds of freedom!!
This poem is superb. I love the images in them and considering it's Autumn now and I am a little cold, your poem certainly warmed me up. I am sick at the moment with the flu I think and I have been so cold in my apartment it was lovely to read your poem. Beautiful.
I love those days where you can go outside and really feel the sun sink into your skin and keep you warm. It's those days where it's not too hot and not too cold. Just perfect. Like your poem
I simply loved it!!!
5 years ago
I begin to dance
as a spirit
--- I love the above, when I was reading this poem. I was picturing grass everywhere and dancing and the wind refreshing, and I cannot describe with words what I was picturing but it was peaceful and I love that. 73 degrees F is a nice temperature.
I haven't been reading nature poems in a while, and this just made me crave for more. Each of us have different outlooks when thinking of summer and I really enjoyed reading yours. The beautiful imagery was kept alive by the soothing word choice. I love the connection of each words with each other. 'Exuberant' is euphonic and I love that as the opening. 'I begin to dance as a spirit whispers peace' gave a lovely image of joy and freedom; happiness, something that's been lacking in my life right now, and reading this gave me this inner feeling of happiness. So, thank you for writing this. Do write more.
5 years ago
73 with a rain in the meadow sounds like it's so ridiculously relaxing. This has some powerful beauty!