Comments : I Believe In God

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    I enjoyed the rhymes :)
    And also that the sins will be washed out, I believe god do forgive our sins too.

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Hm, a little inconsistent with the capitalisation today? The Hs on 'He' and 'Him' should all be capitalised since you're pertaining to God.
    I must say, the personification/capitalisation with: Believe, Reigns, Love--I didn't quite get.
    The rhymes were good though. Also, I love the message.

    ''Cause God washed my soul out!'
    This line was a bit confusing..? 'Washed my soul out', was rather nonsensical. I must advice you not to sacrifice clarity for rhyme.

    But overall, a well-written piece and I like it. Keep writing
    -X

    • 5 years ago

      by Cardwell

      I fixed the capitalization errors, and I changed the final rhyme. but I'm not sure if it's any better. Tell me what you think :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Cardwell

    Yes, this one was a bit "on the spot" for a forum post. I'm considering deletion

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Do not delete it! It's beautiful. I'm just rather picky today haha

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    There is a God and he is near.
    He has given his life to pay for our sins.
    Everybody has a judgement day coming
    and we better start preparing repenting
    our sins and cleansing our soul
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    No time to comment but what a piece! Nominated it for the weekly contest and hope it gains votes! And do NOT delete it. Don't you dare lol. Mwa.

    • 5 years ago

      by Cardwell

      Thank you, Noura! And don't you worry,
      . I won't :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow,,I absolutely loved it,,u sure said it and layed it all down,,its so true and real,,perfect honesty,,its a heavenly poem 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Also I must say,,nomination :D

  • 5 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Hope outside Christ Jesus, is loss. Him who knows God true, has found Life. Good job!

  • 5 years ago

    by Emma from the Netherlands

    Beautiful poem.... But I hope you'll wait a while to see his face :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Alanis

    Love this poem. God will come again....<3

  • 5 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Cardwell, this poem is amazing. The flow is great and the message is crystal clear. My favorite part would have to be the first stanza because it always makes me happy to think of something like that. I want to see the Angels when I go to heaven. I want them to sing for me and welcome me home. What a beautiful poem.

    Excellent
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    I agree with Dagmar, as I had said previously, your talent is not buried in the ground! You do honor God, when he appears you will not be ashamed.

    Great poem!
    5/5
    Ken