Comments : Catching Raindrops; Your Sadness

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    This is beautiful. Your choice of words as usual was amazing.

    I try to blink back
    disgrace and despair as your
    wind and rain continually snuff
    out my flame; my love..

    This line really made me jealous, i was like, why dint i think of that. Its very original and i loved how you have portrayed disgrace and despair. Wonderful

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    I agree Paul she is an artist
    This poem have really high quality metaphors lol
    I think if I kept writing my whole life I wont get one metaphor as good as yours lol

    I can say nothing in here
    Just you sre brilliant writer -nominated
    Keep writing =)

    Edited : sorry ran out of votes this week :\

    • 5 years ago

      by Xanthe

      Thanks you two (:
      Both of you are really bad liars!! lol. But thanks

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    Lol
    Will I lie to u? (maybe) lmao jk
    Really this one was pretty good xD

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You did excellent, what a lovely poem

  • 5 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Xanthe,

    I want to say that your poetry is amazing. I've read quite a few of your poems and I cannot get over how good your write. Makes me jealous...

    I can sense so many emotions in this poem. The main one I feel (besides sadness) when I read it would have to be disbelief-especially when you talk about the fleece covering you.

    I am glad you won the club challenge. You deserve it-you did a beautiful job.

    Excellent
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Well, this makes the 3rd time I've tried to comment, so if it makes 3 comments I'm sorry :/ My phone sucks! Anyway, I'm so glad you won! This is such an amazing piece. I agree with Purple Rose, I'm so jealous of how good you write and even of your critiques of others poems - you're wonderful! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Lioness

    I love this poem! The first two lines got me, as if you wanted to heat this person from beneath them so they can warm up and the light shine again from within.

    Argh! Such beautiful sadness in this write! I love the title. Raindrops remind me of tears. This poem made me want to cry. I think I am very sensitive at this point in my life and I am tearing up as I am writing this. This poem did touch me and I can feel the sadness and depression completely.

    Awesome write

    x

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    --- I feel like I can't dissect this piece because the message is clear to me and also because I think everything is pretty direct. You tried to understand that someone but unfortunately, you couldn't. :(

    The starting point was fabulous:

    These hands held a candle
    beneath you, hoping to rekindle
    the long-forgotten light within
    your soul.

    --- but so full of sadness, specially when we arrived to the end. I also felt frustration because those hands were to small.

    Very good, I had the hunch that this poem was going to win.

    P.S... your writing stands out. :P

  • 5 years ago

    by Alanis

    Beautiful poem. The emotion kept me wanting more:) lovely metaphors and really good expression. Keep writing

  • 5 years ago

    by Thomas

    Nicely written and congrats on winning the contest

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Hw culd u expect ua fleece to protect me..

    l luv this.nyc work

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    Stellar as everything you write with your small hands but never inadequate.

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Great! Another brilliant piece, Xanthe. One of my fav. Sorry I can't comment long coz I have only limited time. But, this piece is really made perfectly.
    5/5
    ~C

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    This poem made me feel many things... The sadness broke my heart, but the intensity in the way you wrote this was very powerful and I love that... when you mix sorrow with burning candles, for me.... its a spiritual awakening of sorts... just my thoughts... This poem was a powerful piece and I enjoyed reading it.. as I have many times now! well done!!