Well, this makes the 3rd time I've tried to comment, so if it makes 3 comments I'm sorry :/ My phone sucks! Anyway, I'm so glad you won! This is such an amazing piece. I agree with Purple Rose, I'm so jealous of how good you write and even of your critiques of others poems - you're wonderful! :)
I love this poem! The first two lines got me, as if you wanted to heat this person from beneath them so they can warm up and the light shine again from within.
Argh! Such beautiful sadness in this write! I love the title. Raindrops remind me of tears. This poem made me want to cry. I think I am very sensitive at this point in my life and I am tearing up as I am writing this. This poem did touch me and I can feel the sadness and depression completely.
6 years ago
--- I feel like I can't dissect this piece because the message is clear to me and also because I think everything is pretty direct. You tried to understand that someone but unfortunately, you couldn't. :(
The starting point was fabulous:
These hands held a candle
beneath you, hoping to rekindle
the long-forgotten light within
--- but so full of sadness, specially when we arrived to the end. I also felt frustration because those hands were to small.
Very good, I had the hunch that this poem was going to win.
This poem made me feel many things... The sadness broke my heart, but the intensity in the way you wrote this was very powerful and I love that... when you mix sorrow with burning candles, for me.... its a spiritual awakening of sorts... just my thoughts... This poem was a powerful piece and I enjoyed reading it.. as I have many times now! well done!!