Comments : All that remains

  • 5 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This is truly sad, T...How I would love to read a happy poem by you again...glad you surfaced, though :0)

    I am sorry for your pain, I can feel it clearly, and also the loss you speak about.

    I challenge you to write me a poem about Arizona, and most especially about Prescott.

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 5 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Geez, a lot of pain in this. But it's really good. ((5))
    ~Harlea

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    It is true, this is sad

    the passion ended it seems, I could think about anything but my first thoughts were of a love to something important.

    P.s. I would also love to see a poem that Ingrid just challenged you :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This is sad to read great job

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    TJ - My King

    Im glad you are here.

  • 5 years ago

    by Krysten

    Beautiful and painful. You managed to convay so much pain into just a few lines. I loved the words you chose to use. Great job :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Darren

    A great example of a poem where every word punches the air.
    Reading aloud, you can put so much stress on each word to really portray anger.
    Love the line, Corpse of prevailing existence.
    Only nit is the last line, I think it should be 'an adherent'
    regards

  • 5 years ago

    by karyssa smith

    I love the descriptive words you used. good job.

  • 5 years ago

    by Exostosis

    I will say, there was appropriate pain. But the core sentiment is resentment, not grief. Observe the vocabulary and the technical alignment. No metaphors depicting bittersweet comparison. There is a certain level of darkness, but mostly anger. Or may be it is me personally, who is engulfed with such vibe.

    Nice to have you back brother.

    very well written.

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    That's a powerful piece, TJ. And your diction is amazing... !

  • 5 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I can feel the strong pain this poem holds, losing something you didnt want to lose.

    Short and powerful, love this piece, great job:)

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    U never fail to amaze me with ur words and ur magnificent poetry 5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Another amazing poem. The imagery is almost tangible, and it places you in the scene. Nice work!