OMG! You are soooooo awesome, and this piece you have right here is just so creative. Usually such poems sound forced, but you have real skills, and I wasn't expecting at all to see such simple words,,, for example: X person... I was expecting: Xylophone lol or X-tra ... haha.... and in Z, zebra or zipper...... here, you have nailed it, and made this poem so much realistic...... and the ending;..... freakin awesome!!! Way to go Nana.....:)
Wow!!! I love this poem!!! First, this alphabetical form is tough but you somehow wrote a creative, emotional poem with great flow! I love that it is so smooth, and isn't forced at all... I'm in love with everything about this poem... I love the title, and how you showed how cold and difficult this person is... and describing him as an Iceman is brilliant!! I love the ending... so well-written!
6 years ago
I'm not sure what form this is either...I can't see the acrostic part (maybe I'm missing something)..I just seen the alphabet part?
Alphabet poetry is quite hard to do and...to be honest...I think your chopped sentences and dragged them down just to make it fit..frangmenting them? It's not a bad poem...it's actually very good...just my opinion on that part :)
This part...honestly...I could be wrong so...ask someone else but...
never saw my empires as
Jungles of classy trees. But you
Killed everything that makes sense.
I think...if you use killed it should be made or...kill and makes....not 100% sure though?
There is no doubt in my mind that this is a great poem and....these are just my thoughts...
Wow Nana. This was lovely, loved how you made it into something sad yet simple, with every letter of the aphlabet :) wonderful job! ((5))
6 years ago
by Mr Rush
I really like how you ended this one! The alphabet acrostic, which I've heard called an abecedarian (I think!) is very tough to finish! There's a sense of individuality about the form of this, and the sole one word line, 'Nothing', was effective, and the abrupt ending was unique, suprising, and clever.