Comments : Night of Love

  • 5 years ago

    by Kate

    "You just melted in my arms and tears started flowing,
    You hugged me tight with our love just growing & growing"

    ^^^ In this last line, you only need one "growing". It still fits the flow amazingly.

    Well... you know... this is so sweet, even I almost cried. Let me start by wishing you and [from the way it sounds] beautiful wife a fantastic life together :)

    I liked the rhyme you put in the poem. A bold move with some but love is bold so yeah. :)

    "This moment of extreme love ended with kisses all around,
    I love you I told you in your love forever I have drowned."

    ^^^ this one is definitely my favorite part of the poem, no doubt. Now, if you dont mind me asking, how long have you two been married? By this poem, it seems recent or maybe you're just an expert at making old flames reappear.

    This poem captures the heart of the reader and it makes you feel the love. It's a beautiful piece. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Ali

    Thanks alot for your sweet and considerate comment & thanks for the correction as well.

    So true love is bold and yea she is my lovely wife and yes its a new bond very recent! and even she loved the poem which was my main objective.

    Thanks again for this lovely comment I will surely go through your poems and comment on them as well.

    Thanks :-)

  • 5 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Ali, its a long poem bt ur rhyming and choice of words make it easy for d reader to read it..
    I loved dis poem.

    • 5 years ago

      by Ali

      Thanks alot for reading and commenting! Really appreciated!!!!!!!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    Really long but I was left wanting to read more...!
    Loaded with emotions and filled with passions!
    I really really loved reading your poem!
    Wonderful piece of poetry!
    Keep writing!!!

    • 4 years ago

      by Ali

      Thanks alot :-)