I liked the picture that I could paint in my mind in accordance to the scene. You had a well thought out structure, and a certain message to give. Well done.

Such an abrupt change of emotion in your words left me startled. Starts out about not wanting to get out of bed in the morning, hitting the snooze alarm. Then talk about the gun and more time, hitting snooze for life. Nice work.

This write started out with not wanting to get out of bed in the mornings and then changes to a somber more serious note towards the end. It plunges the reader's thoughts into a pit of darkness...take care.

Awesome. Very twisting. Massive turnaround & yet connected. Simply amazing.

Great write friend.

all the best & take care