Torture

Excellent write Tony!!

I find it hard to talk when you leave
me in a state of suffocation, my collar
is shrinking or maybe your hand is
grasping the chain a tiny fraction
more day by day.

^^ I adored this stanza here....I cant tell you how relateable that is!! To want to say so much but you feel so suffocated and you arent sure if its because of their doing or your own..

The title fits this perfectly...Thats exactly what this feels like. I use to get anxiety attacks and thats what I felt in those moments like my thoughts and my breathless state was complete torture...I feel like this is one of your best pieces yet!!

This is a powerful poem . Most of us have felt this way to a degree at one time
Very well written. I would not change a thing

Ahhh, Tony... your words always touch me in many ways. Being suffocated in that way definitely is all kinds of torture.

Perfectly penned and added to my favorites!

Hello :)

Ok, for starters: I love the title and how you don't use it in the poem but it is easy to tell that's what you're talking about. Nice use.

I love the rhyme there is in the second line. Intentional or not, it adds something to the poem. The flow is very nice. Flawless really. And the fact that each stanza is a sentence.

"Your presence drains the life out
of my lungs,breathing becomes
almost impossible with these
shattered ribs,representing
every promise you ever made."
^^^^^ definitely one of my favorite stanzas. It's a very strong start and it expresses the conflict and shows pain all in one. Love it.

"I live inside each and every scar
traumatized by every image impaled
at the back of mind, It may not be
visible to the human eye but in my
memory, I live this life every second."
^^^^^ such a great end.... So strong and just... perfect. It truly is perfect.

I found this difficult t read, Tony, it touched a part of me and while it affected me, a poem that can give a sense of relief to someone while reliving memories is actually a very strong and deep one, that needs to be credited for it's power.

The sad emotion within this piece was not evident at first glance, the anger was, the hurt, betrayal, hate but then it came through on a second read, with the language and darkness being a cover for something more powerful and harder to understand,

I know I am not making much sense here, but what I am trying to say is that this piece is very well written, and hats off to you.

Thank you
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