Comments : Seeds of Deception

  • 4 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Love this! I like the arrangement and the pace. You don't know where it's going, and the tone isn't definitive until the last few lines. It all works together very well with the dark imagery. You've made this a very detailed and in-depth story, with only a few lines, not an easy feat. Nice work, Amreen

    • 4 years ago

      by Amreen

      Thank you Rusheena:)

  • 4 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I absolutely love how you meshed all of those titles/prompts together! Not easy to do in such a few lines, at least not to me lol...but you hit the ball out of the park!

    I like how in the beginning it's a mystery... and you don't really know where the story is going until the end.

    I'm assuming the 'her' is her mother, who was the photographer, she was looking through the 'lens' and seen what was going on, but never did capture the 'picture' for proof - she let it slide... she let it go on to please her husband. :/

    Very sad story, but written beautifully!

    • 4 years ago

      by Amreen

      Thank you Hannah! Ya the story revolves around the mother and her daughter being brainwashed by her father.

  • 4 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Powerful piece Amreen!
    Well done!

    :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Sourav

    Very well structured... I must say...

    And with limited words and lines, you've created a clear tragic picture. Nice work.

  • 4 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Very deeply written.. i feel alot of emotion from this, keep up the good work

  • 4 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Very skillfully done