I'm so enjoying your repetition in the poems, they work really well.
This poem is sad, we all are desperate at times, though I think I know what this poem is about and I would definitely be desperate too which makes me sad and at the same time grateful because I still have time to be around her, Take care Meena.
Continue writing, your poems are turning smoother.
This style is so different from everything I read from you. I guess I like it too because it shows a different Meena,
3 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
Meena I agree with Lucero I liked the repeating lines as well. They work well to enhance the message of this poem. This really is different from your other one's. I love here how you made the character "helpless" it makes the reader connect more because you did a great job showing the sadness they feel. You miss this person a lot. It seems like someone you loved dearly. The wording brings a softness to the poem because it's loving overall. The love the people have for each other is wonderful. I liked the last stanza because you need them but they are away now. Overall this is a beautiful and sad write.
Sighs..... Meena, Meena, Meena!!
This is a teary eyed poem, leaving me in a puddle of emotions.
I adore this poem, it touches every reader in some way. We have all felt this moment of sorrow, when we truly yearn for the one we love, or have lost or crave to have in our life.
It's simplistic elegance and topped with a very creative and elegant ending left me speechless!