Comments : In Prayers

  • 2 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    This here comes out like a manthra for meditation. The relaxation and the peace it evokes is felt. I liked it and I can't help myself by adding more comment to make this even better...sorry!

    Here is my version and its just my thoughts...

    Take a plunge
    deep into (your)
    subconscious...

    Going (Go) through
    the layers
    of inner darkness,

    Tapping(Tap) the
    ENERGY
    from The Universe

    (and) Overcome
    general
    tendencies;

    Awaken
    Enlightened!

    ^^In this end here I feel it could be better with an added word like Awaken soul...Enlightened! Just my thoughts.

    All in all I liked the read...Keep penning :)

    • 2 years ago

      by alka mendiratta

      Thank you so much for enhancing it over all .
      Wrote it for 'myself ', with your version it goes for all .

  • 2 years ago

    by Tim

    I love this piece, it's something that's so personal, but one that a select few I know will resonate with. You're written it perfectly, and really got me thinking bout my own experiences with consciouness and inner understanding.

    Keep Penning

    5/5

    • 2 years ago

      by alka mendiratta

      Thank you Tim.
      Life is all about overcoming our weaknesses and striving to be better human beings.

  • 2 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Hmmmmmmm

    nicely written dear
    good job

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Excellent piece. I love the end.