World Snippets

by Narph   Mar 16, 2016


I think the moon is big and bright
but on this night
it looks lacking, sort of
shellacked on the page of the sky
like a post-it, don't forget it
I'm still here
I'm still here

I think the sky is wide and safe
but on this day
there's a plastering of clouds,
like it used to be proud, but now
it's hiding itself, masking itself
like me
like me

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  • 1 year ago

    by Saerelune

    Hey there, better late than never, but I just wanted to post the comment I wrote for you as a judge long long time ago:

    ""From head to toe, this poem makes me imagine a child-like voice, full of curiosity, full of wonder. I love how the author seems to be searching for her words, hesitating maybe, by saying "it looks lacking, sort of" then continues to liken it to something. Then comes the almost-desperate yet still cute repetition. The imagery and words are simple, but it's the voice and melody that make the first stanza so very attractive. The same techniques were applied to the second stanza, and I must say I love how the structure of the poem turns out this way. Both stanzas evoke a kind of sadness that does not penetrate the soul but still makes you want to help out, like when you see a kid running on the streets then tripping. Kudos for evoking such a subtle emotion with such simplicity, it's always nice to read poems with a clear tone."