Why do my lady's lips glisten with blood?
Just yesterday we kissed like lovers do;
your dress once fine is torn and stained with mud,
and skin so grey has lost its normal hue.
Was it last night while I was fast asleep,
that from a bite you turned from life to death?
How fate hath cast a lethal cut so deep
and stole her life by smothering her breath.
I ought to slice her head with razor sword -
But how, when love for her beats in my chest?
My need to have her still, I do implore;
so as she staggers here, this is our test:
I cast away my sword, oh Zombie Queen;
I'd rather share your curse and be with thee.
Sorry for being a bit late with this, but here's a comment I made as a weekly judge back then:
"Lots of rhyming/formed poetry this week, but I must say this one stood out to me due to its smoothness and humorous yet also romantic content. When I read the first few lines I was drawn in by all these questions, lamenting the persona's lover. I was truly confused when I came upon the line: "I ought to slice her head with razor sword", since I didn't realise that the death that came upon this lover was because of a zombie curse. Everything else was so romantic until I read that line, but it was a pleasant twist. "
Michael, I'm glad you posted this on 'deeplydesturbes' piece as I read it when you posted but was working at the time so didn't have time to comment etc, so here I am :)
I really like the zombie theme and it would be better to be zombies together than to live a life of pure misery, right? Reminds me of meat loafs 'i would do anything for love' for some reason. A wonderful sonnet, I can't comment on ip as I've not a clue about it lol.
All the best and watch out for that zombie ;)
1 year ago
Whoaa, that was definitely interesting! o.o
I really really like this, like, I haven't read such a scenario before! Creative, smooth read, well versed.
I just wish I could come up with things like this! ^_^