Earache (syntuit) (HM)

by - Mr. Darcy   May 6, 2016


Piranhas tearing
away the swollen skin where
my sanity hides

michael
2016

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  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comment:

    Michael took this form and power packed it with an awesome message and statement, that I could go many angles with...

    Earaches can make a strong man fall to his knees... and so can a bad conversation in a crowded room... love the different twists I could take with this poem.. perfect!

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    I only went and finished with a form.
    My 4 points is to a piece of formed poetry. But it is a form that is restricted in one way, but a meadow in another. Mr Darcy has written a real gem here.
    I smiled when I read it and once I had read all the poems nominated tonight I immediately thought of this. I just love the last line in relation to the first. It is also a form that I haven't seen much of.
    One that I am sure I have written myself by accident when writing a haiku or senryu.
    Thanks for posting a quirky but clever piece. 4 points

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Love this,

    Intrigued by the title, the last line is marvelous

    great write

  • 1 year ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Michael, your use of the syntuit form shines. It allows so much more freedom than the limitations of the haiku or senryu.

    The image of your sanity hiding is a great departure. I can picture an anthropomorphic Sanity cowering behind barriers made of drums and tympani, all to no avail, waiting for the inevitable evisceration.

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, awesome syntuit on an earache! You described that pain to a T