Comments : Beauty

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Wonderfully written! So very true and so sad that we woman buy into the public perception that we aren't good enough in our own skin. You did an awesome job putting this into words.

  • 1 year ago

    by Maher

    Beautiful in a scary and realistic way. I love the mirror's role in making your reflection another character. The world is slowly but surely losing it's shine. It'll only get worse the further into these things societies delve into. Make your world a just one. That's what counts now. Thank you for sharing your work with all of our worlds :)

  • 1 year ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    There are a couple punctuation errors throughout, but nothing too serious. The only major corrections would be:

    ___________________
    the world is the devils disguise.

    Correction:
    the world is the devil's disguise.

    ___________________

    As we looked in the mirror,
    we bean to grow old.

    Correction:

    "we began to grow old."
    ___________________
    "I see the cost of beauty now,

    it's an unaffordable lie."

    Correction:

    "I see the cost of beauty now:
    it's an unaffordable lie."
    ___________________

    This was actually a touching poem, quite vivid imagery of a girl in front of this mystical mirror that changes her as she stands in front of it. Almost grotesque, the imagery, but important and striking. I thought it was a unique concept, and you really did make the reader feel the person before the mirror change into a completely different person... and it's to be debated who actually died at the end of the poem ... assuming that's what's meant by "led to my demise."

    It could be that the person before the mirror had been killed and she had burgeoned into this new, fake person... or that she herself died as a result of hating not being herself.

    Either way, this story actually moved me. I feel you, with the sensation of looking in the mirror and just wishing I could make adjustments... but the more I make, the less I'm me.

    Beautiful write,
    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello and a warm welcome to the site.

    This is a striking poem in content but also visually; the way it is laid out really drives the points you are making home.

    I have a daughter and I genuinely despair and worry about the way she may care how the world will perceive her. The image of these 'perfect women' that girls are supposed to conform to is disgusting - everywhere you look, it's shoved in your face.

    Sorry, I've had my rant! Anyway, I blame the Kardashians.....

    Important write, well executed.

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Wow this is a very powerful write with a deep meaning.
    Todays perception of what a woman should be is truly astonishing and I honestly believe it will get worse not better, with time. I often look in the mirror and wonder if I changed things if I'd be me anymore because we are who we are whether people like it or not and I am a great believer that beauty is skin deep because what does it matter if you're beautiful on the outside with a horrible inside..
    I do feel for the young girls /women of today having to grow up in this society and even the men who feel it necessary to pass judgement on our looks rather than getting to know what's inside.
    Anyway, great imagery and rhyme here. Wish I could nominate it because of the meaning and the piece as an whole and I hope somebody does.

    All the best, Em

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Hi there! Welcome to P&Q! Really enjoyed this piece, although I find the line-breaks between the stanzas to be a bit excessive. That said, I like the inspiration from snow white, and the breath of harsh reality. Society places a great emphasis on aesthetics, rather than meaning & function, and it's terrifying. Well written!

  • 1 year ago

    by Courtney

    Thanks for all your comments everyone!

  • 1 year ago

    by Poetess

    Wow. This is definitely very powerful. Something many of us can relate to in one way or another.

    Welcome to P&Q!

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Incredible portrayal of the price of vanity and the weather of time. Really enjoyable read. I don't think there is a woman out there who hasn't wanted to change something about herself. Milly x

  • 1 year ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Nice interpretation about the fake world.
    the world always put us in comparison.
    and the fact is we are always unique.

    Good Work.

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment

    Reality been put out, attacked and shaped to
    behold the eyes of society forgetting the individual
    and her feelings; making her worthless and not
    appreciated unless she is shaped to the way of the
    society! It's a sad fact which everyone goes
    through and everyone fails to see the person for
    who she is rather they all take a go and try and
    beautify her to their ways.

    The imagery is so dark and cruel and it hurts just
    to read it. The part that stood out for me was the
    image of the self emerging from the mirror and
    slicing away/molding the woman and the
    descriptions is crystal-clear it made me cringe,
    it made me angry that society still has the power
    to put down an individual and to drive that person
    to madness! An aching reality it hurts to read...

    • 1 year ago

      by Courtney

      Thanks so much for reading. That is true for sure. We look up to unrealistic looking people and it hurts. I wrote this when I was getting ready to sign a modeling contract with a very well known fashion company. And the things they wanted me to change were not worth it. It's painful that we are not enough as is. Thanks for the read and wonderful comment!