Comments : Broken Shells

  • 8 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautiful write, what an amazing point you have in here. Great rhyming and what an inspirational read!

  • 8 months ago

    by k.won

    great message scrittore. I'd rather be a broken shell too.

  • 8 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    How true. Loved this piece. I too would rather be the broken shell x

  • 8 months ago

    by Ren

    "(I'd rather be a broken shell
    Parts of me lost in sea
    Than find myself trapped by
    The expectations of society.) "
    ^^
    I HAVE NO WORDS! This is absolutely stunning! So glad this is nominated! Fantastic job!

    (<3)^ LOVE BUTTON HAS BEEN CLICKED!

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Love love love..

    Broken shells are definitely the most beautiful!!!

    And so I began collecting
    These shells so often left
    By those who cannot see
    Beauty in the imperfect
    ^^
    My fave stanza so true and fluent also

  • 8 months ago

    by Fredy

    These broken shells were stunning
    Their jagged edges a story told
    Of a life lived much harder
    Perhaps more full, perhaps more bold
    ^^
    Favorite stanza, really love it!

  • 8 months ago

    by gopi nath

    Awsome lines keep writing

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Congratulations on your win :)

  • 8 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Congrats on your win! :-)

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    Such true words spoken, this is really beautiful. Congratulations on your front page write and win.

  • 8 months ago

    by Ren

    Congrats on the win!! :D

  • 8 months ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Delightful poem with a wonderful message. Your work is strengthened by keeping the analogy consistent throughout the poem. Well deserved win.

  • 8 months ago

    by Scrittore

    Wow!! I never expected to win a poetry contest. Thank you for all the kind comments! <3

  • 8 months ago

    by Maher

    This is a well thought out and well written poem. The analogy you've used is nothing short of beautiful, meaningful, easy to grasp and packed with a great moral. Don't be surprised that you won this contest, because it's no wonder that you did. Congrats ma'am :)

  • 8 months ago

    by DarkLight

    A constructed message that really deserved this win. Congratulations.

  • 7 months ago

    by Thomas

    Judging comment:

    "To begin, this poem has a solid grasp of unforced and intuitive rhyme choices, making smart use of slant rhyme in two stanzas particularly. It appears clear that care was taken with the diction of the piece to assist it in flowing more smoothly, as well.

    “And as I discarded the broken shells
    Taking note of their beauty too
    I found myself wondering why
    Those seemed to have less value.”

    There is an extremely captivating and thoughtful analysis of nature here - why, because something is broken, is it viewed as lesser? Of course, there may be logic in brokenness diminishing the physical value of an item, but on a scale of beauty, especially the poem’s subject of shells, the poet is quite right to see that they can still be just as beautiful as whole shells.

    The poem is also a strong analysis of society as a whole; shells, sure, but also people. Time and experience may mark people with scars and stories, but they are still as valuable as someone without the history. And the history is what makes that person - “What adventures went unexplored?” - and tells that they have lived an experienced life.

    A wonderful poem and a truly beautiful look at the world."