Comments : Devils Pawn (My First Sonnet)

  • 3 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Milly,
    You know what I think of this through our pm. Superb - genuinely.

    All the best

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Milly, this is awesome...wow, a stunning first sonnet.

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Wham! Bam! Ma'am :0

    Miss Milly this is a wonderful first attempt at a sonnet. So well constructed and a beautiful flow, throughout.

    Well done you :)

    Michael x

  • 3 months ago

    by Em

    Technical issues so double post

  • 3 months ago

    by Em

    Milly for your first sonnet you nailed it though I'm not sure on meter etc etc but who cares because this is just mind-blowing. I still cannot get my head around this form.

    1/ My initial thoughts were this person is definitely like a bad smell hanging around or a fly around sh.. (you get me) always there even after all this time and when you smell the BO spray or aftershave they used to wear it sets off all these emotions and jeez aren't they bad because I think this person was bad for you regardless of what you thought at the time. Just my thoughts... I like the imagery of their smell sending your blood ice cold even if it's a bad thing because it shows the hold they had possibly still have on you and I know exactly how it feels.

    2/ I feel this is about control though I may be waaaàay off the mark. Very powerful.

    3/ Wow wow wow !! Kindness always prevails in the end.

    Couplet: This is the most powerful thing I have ever read and so very true and relatable in my opinion. The grass (despite what we think) is not always greener on the other side unless we make it so. That's my view anyway.

    All the best
    Em x

  • 3 months ago

    by Ren

    Excellent job, Milly! Fantastic!

  • 2 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Love this,

    as your first how did you find the writing of it, I've only written 3 as I find them rather awkward. Obviously a problem you didn't encounter.

    Craig

    A

  • 2 months ago

    by Brenda

    Milly, awesome first sonnet! You really nailed it. Interesting topics you've been writing about lately. Well done-

  • 3 weeks ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Sonnets are notoriously difficult. I can see you've worked hard, even using ye olde language. Like me you have found the stress placement a challenge and have errors as a result. Milly, this is an excellent first attempt; certainly a better one than I achieved. Lol

    Well done. ((Hugs))

  • 1 week ago

    by Free verse

    Wow Milly, why didn't you write any sonnet after this one.
    You are quite good at this format.
    Atleast write one for everlasting sonnet contest.