Comments : Celebration

  • 8 months ago

    by Jamie

    The imagery is stunning. Love this!

    • 8 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thank you Jamie. Glad you liked it. I tried to conjour up a nice celebration scene :)

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Loved this is just seems to slip off the tongue :)

  • 8 months ago

    by Mark

    Champagne is flowing, fast, bubbly and bright
    Green patterned bunting, is hanging in sight

    Milly, great to read a piece from you. Your rhyming explored this celebration so well. Your choice of words created a fun, joyous atmosphere!

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    Milly, absolutely loved this in the challenge, love it as much here. What a party you went to! I could almost taste the food and hear the music. Well done-BTW, next time you have a party like this I am so coming! :)

  • 8 months ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Life is all about meeting new people making friends and enjoying as it is too short.
    You have captured the theme of celebration very well.
    Milly, now I got the line to tell my friends not wait months for a gin and lime.

  • 8 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Love this Milly ... you can feel the lovely, lively party atmosphere through your words! Brilliant :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 8 months ago

    by Michael

    Miss Milly,

    what a lovely gentle rhyming piece about a party, and pinching chocolate cake the largest I may add :)
    (I would too)
    Nice happy poem
    Much love
    Michael x

  • 8 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    What a sweet and lovely piece sounds like much fun. Add to my favorite. Take care

  • 8 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    I love chocolate cake too and I would get the biggest slice too, Milly. A very light-hearted, enjoyable read. Beautifully rhymed too. Loved it.

  • 8 months ago

    by Joanna Allanson

    I can taste the gin and lime...I might have to go and get one! Really nice poem. You can almost hear the chink of glasses and music.

  • 8 months ago

    by AngelaLuisaCory

    What a lovely happy poem Millie - it's great and really captures the evening spent in the company of friends - I love it!

    Angie X

    • 8 months ago

      by Milly Hayward

      Thankyou everyone for all of your lovely comments. I really appreciate them. It's always nice to hear what people think. Take care. Milly x

  • 8 months ago

    by naaz

    Let's start with the theme of the poem.
    It's celebration, I mean who doesn't want it.
    All of us can relate to this one as we all need celebration in our life.
    Infact, most of us find little occasions in our life so that we can celebrate.
    So I loved the theme as it is my favorite.

    Mood of the poem is about happiness, enjoyment, sharing thoughts, cracking jokes, even making new friends.
    This is what happens most of the times in the celebrations.

    The imaginary you used are from visual to audible to olfactory to tactile.
    Like in first stanza it is visual in these lines

    Champagne is flowing, fast, bubbly and bright
    Green patterned bunting, is hanging in sight

    Along with the alliteration "flowing fast" and "bubbly bright."

    In 2nd it is audible

    Music is playing, the old stuff I think
    Now they're all singing to Pink or the Link

    In 3rd it is olfactory

    Next there is food served, with scrummy nice smell
    We've fallen under, the chefs magic spell

    And tactile in fourth one

    The largest piece, I just reach out and take
    It melts in the mouth, then just disappears

    And Like a meal is incomplete without a dessert. 5th stanza is that sweet course.
    Saying to all the friends that let's not wait for happiness we can have it whenever we want.
    Let's meet again, soon, and celebrate the gift called life as much as we can.
    Because life is all about happiness and we feel happy when we are with our dear ones.

    Milly, the rhyme scheme, aabb.
    I always find it difficult to write in this scheme.
    You did it with perfection.
    All in all, a very good poem on the theme of celebration and the way you captured it with your words, I loved it.
    I didn't find any flaws.