Comments : Once the jasmines grow (Rondeau)

  • 2 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a beautiful piece. Well done on this and good to see a new post from you.

    Take care

  • 2 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    I like your little Kat Sinners gospel! Hope I don't hurt your feeling with my critique', but, a by the book Rondeau is the following; a thirteen-line poem, divided into three stanzas of 5, 3, and 5 lines, with only two rhymes throughout and with the opening words of the first line used as a refrain at the end of the second and third stanzas. I agree with Ben that it is a lovely poem, love the heartfelt expressions throughout, and the unforced rhyming. Good job!

  • 2 months ago

    by Brenda

    Shane, a lovely write. Wonderful to see you on the boards. I hope all is well with you.

  • 2 months ago

    by Mark

    Great win!

  • 2 months ago

    by Ren

    All I can say is love button has been clicked...like...multiple times (<3)

    Amazing job and congrats on the win!!

  • 2 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Wow, a lovely poem. Congrats on the win!

  • 2 months ago

    by Brise

    This is beautiful! Congrats on the win :)

  • 2 months ago

    by Ya----Na

    Thank you so much, everyone, once again

  • 2 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Aw Shane! A well deserved win. Such a beautiful write and perfect for the Rondeau form :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 2 months ago

    by naaz

    Sorry, won't be able to write in depth comment for this beautiful creation of yours, but would like to say something.

    Tout amour semé, tot ou tard, fleurira.

    • 2 months ago

      by Ya----Na

      Mais elle ne comprend pas qu'une fleur ne peut pas fleurir sans soleil, et l'homme ne peut pas vivre sans amour.

  • 3 weeks ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    A structured writing, that too a rondeau. I do not know much about the technicalities of a rondeau but this piece was very well presented. Many a times, I personally feel, structured poetry is attempted very well, is likeable to read, but tends to be a hit and a miss (I myself have been a victim to these attempts) but this piece was very well done. It was beautiful written in a difficult structure as I have known, and did not let the reader drift apart with mismatched sentences. Full of hope, this piece deserves my full praise. Well done.