I like your little Kat Sinners gospel! Hope I don't hurt your feeling with my critique', but, a by the book Rondeau is the following; a thirteen-line poem, divided into three stanzas of 5, 3, and 5 lines, with only two rhymes throughout and with the opening words of the first line used as a refrain at the end of the second and third stanzas. I agree with Ben that it is a lovely poem, love the heartfelt expressions throughout, and the unforced rhyming. Good job!
Mais elle ne comprend pas qu'une fleur ne peut pas fleurir sans soleil, et l'homme ne peut pas vivre sans amour.
2 months ago
A structured writing, that too a rondeau. I do not know much about the technicalities of a rondeau but this piece was very well presented. Many a times, I personally feel, structured poetry is attempted very well, is likeable to read, but tends to be a hit and a miss (I myself have been a victim to these attempts) but this piece was very well done. It was beautiful written in a difficult structure as I have known, and did not let the reader drift apart with mismatched sentences. Full of hope, this piece deserves my full praise. Well done.