Comments : For The Love Of Silence

  • 4 months ago

    by Hellon

    You ask a lot of relevant questions here and the repetition of 'what happens then' makes it a reality.

    The only suggestion I can make and, it's just my personal preference I'll add, I'd remove the ellipses from the first four stanzas and save them for the last stanza. I'd also separate it so it stands alone and maybe add a couple of capitals, like this

    And when only SILENCE begins
    to make ABSOLUTE sense

    ...what happens then?

    Just my thoughts...you haven't been on in a while so...nice to see you back :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    The repetition of what happens then works really well giving the reader a punchy, thought provoking piece. Loved it. Milly x

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    What indeed happens then? Well done with this-

  • 4 months ago

    by DarkNDangerous

    Great topic, great piece. Just in awe of how well this was portrayed with edge and ease at the same time.