wow, this was such an incredibly, no other word, pretty poem. the beginning was so lovely, it really did give me pleasent feeling as i read it.
"Life wisped by me as a tear rolled down my face
For once, I was smiling, I felt love in your embrace
Careful, weaving movements as we tiptoed across the floor
One step forward, one step back, every surface to explore"
so beautiful, 'careful weaving moments' such a pretty line. and i have to admit when the lines came, "ill meet you in heaven" i had to hold back tears. such a lovely poem, the ending line at each stance, "are we dancing yet" and then at the end..."we were dancing" gives it a tragic but happy love story. i loved it, great job
Beautifully written :) i loved it. I could just see the clouds in Heaven and the angels. I could hear the fluttering of angel wings. I could hear the tear fall from your cheek. I could hear it and see it all. Good imagery. You're a very talented writer and I hope you continue to write :D