What they see.

by -Erin-   Apr 30, 2005


You stand in the corner by the door,hands in your pockets staring at the floor.
Quiet?
shy?
scared?
Thats how they see you.
Except they wouldn't know,cause I'm the only one you ever talk to here.
But in the end i was just as fooled as they are about you.
Secretly i guess i knew,i just told myself it couldn't be true.
I was just a curious girl who got caught up in your world.
I should have....
Stopped before i started.
looked before i leaped into the lies.
Maybe then i wouldn't be curled up in a heap on my bed writing about you,and how
you left me just a...little broken hearted?
I don't blame you,for all of it,that is,it was partly my fault.
I went looking for the excitement
i knew what i was getting into
But yet i still pushed my conscience aside and went along for the ride.
Now the rides over....
But i still see you everyday....
you haven't changed your still the guy in the corner by the door,hands in your pockets staring at the floor.
Quiet?
Shy?
Scared?
Fooling everyone but me, because i know the truth.
Yet i could never hate you like you think i do.

*Please tell me what you think*
-Erin

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  • 12 years ago

    by Carmen

    that was great. whatd he do though?

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    You got some talent! i gotta hand it to ya! this poem is awesome I loved it!! 5/5!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Shy

    Nice 4/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Nici

    An unusual layout to this poem, but that just added to its value. There was still a flow, by the use of description.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 12 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    Hmmm
    If you really want the truth, I must admit that I didn't really like the poem because the flow is so choppy. I got lost several times and had to re-read it quite a few times. But, the idea is still very good, though the poem needs work. Work on the lines, because some are so much longer than the others. Maybe even divide the poem up, that would help. Over all, the poem was okay, but it needs more work. Keep writing, you have some great ideas!
    Satuxxa