Comments : Girl by the window

  • 12 years ago

    by Amit

    Nicely written, very well done.

    5/5, Take Care, Always Believe in Love,

    Nidhi's Love, Amit.

  • 12 years ago

    by Gem

    That was really really good. It gets into the mind of a girl perfectly!! You have great talent, keep on writing! Thanx for the comment!! Lotsa Luv, Gem xx

  • 12 years ago

    by AJ

    Very well written. Good job. Can't wait to read more. 5/5

    -no more

  • 12 years ago

    by DarkAngel

    Really good well done..keep it up...like to read more...

    -TheGone

  • 12 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    ok the main thing u have to work on is ur stanzas and rhyming scheem, u cant use the same word to rhyme. like here "The girl that sits by the window,staring blankly at the sky.
    No one knows her pain.
    No one knows her sorrow.
    Her longing to be free,to jump from the window and fly into the sky.
    " with sky it makes u sound like an ammiture poet

  • 12 years ago

    by -Erin-

    Thanks for your honesty ashley!

    I'll work on that ^.^

  • 12 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    This one is better than the other one, and I enjoyed this one because of the simple words used...it was a bit plain but still the meaning was deep and symbolic. For this one, work some more on the flow too, but otherwise I liked the idea and the poem. Keep writing,
    Satuxxa

  • 12 years ago

    by ** JeNa **

    great job, ur a good writer and have talent, hope to read more of ur work soon!!

  • 12 years ago

    by VampyraKi†

    Cool poem keep uo the good work

  • 12 years ago

    by Bleeding_Red_Fallen_Angel

    Wow, that was really good. Nice write hun. >3jess

  • 12 years ago

    by Nici

    The flow was affected in places, but the raw emotion I found in this piece compensated for that.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 12 years ago

    by Shy

    nice poem

  • 12 years ago

    by ~*LorienElf*~

    excellent poem! i liked the flow you had and the content was beautiful. you could really feel the strife of this girl. keep it up!

    ~*LorienElf*~

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    well now i'm thinking of it I might of insulted you without meaning too, I said "you got some talent" i meant you got alot!! sorry thats just something said that came out wrong! newayz this is an awesome poem!! i loved it!! 5/5, keep up the awesome work!

  • 12 years ago

    by paulina.♥

    Great poem! I loved it! It was deep. You have a lot of talent, dear. Keep writing!

    -Ice

  • 12 years ago

    by Emily

    This is one of my favorite poems by you!
    ~Emmy

  • 11 years ago

    by Bullet For My Valentine

    I love it, its really awsome