good job. i get so sick of people who dont rhyme anymore, so rhyming at ALL is great. the theme of the poem is wonderful. the rythym is good. youre a great writer.

great job, flows very nicely keep up the good work!! please rate and comment my 2 latest poems, thanks

Very unique and very well written. I really like that! 5/5 Take Care~ Brooke

Hey what a great poem. I don't think it's bad at all. It was beautifully written with alot of feeling. I love the way it flows. Great stuff :)

It's a fairly well written poem; I liked the confusion and fog in it. Sometimes I feel this way; I get more than I bargained for.

An interesting piece, that was a pleasure to read! It was diffentily unique, but in a good way.

Keep Writing
Nici

PS Thanks for commenting on my poem, much appriecated. I will read some more of work tommoroow, but it is getting late now.

Excellent...I love how you never really come out and tell us what the ride is....drugs? Anyway it kept me interested until the end.

Seemless, kind of without time and then suddenly brings you to the realisation that it's not all so fun anymore.

good piece.

Wow this is really good
it's the first poem i have seen in this section that i have liked

Great job!! i gotta say you did awesome! 5/5!!

this is definently a great life poem. using an amusement park ride in your pov is a great way to explain a certain situation in life. great way of expressing it. 5/5

Wow, this poem is leading to a sequel. I highly reccomend one!
~Emmy