It confused me a little bit. anyway, the structure was alright, and I could tell how free the sentances were. Don't forget your poetic liscence! You can play with words and contrast them to any form you want. I like how she reflects on memories in the pictures. It is very symbalic, a good element to have in poetry. i liked it, but it seemed a little too free in some parts in the first and second to last segments. 4/5
The sad thing is you're right and it's very unlikely to ever change. I like this very much...I love how you focused on only one person and her memories...her family and animals. One can only imagine what each person was going through...It's funny to me how people were more concerned about trivial things like pictures and such more so than their lives...you never really appreciate things like that until they're gone...Very nice write Sean...
Excellent write. i liked the style which you used too. you kept it simple in ways but yet shared a message that is important and got it across to the reader is such a creative way. we all probably look at the effects of this event in different ways. and now we have to face what Rita might do as well. we need to learn to help others better, to get them in a safer place faster and to save lifes sooner.
I really enjoyed this poem!! I love that it comes from only one persons perspective and it describes all her feelings..your right about this whole peice and its quite sad! Wonderful write my friend please keep it up!
Poignant and well written, interesting take on the New Orleans Event. Thanks so much for the wonderful commentry you gave to one of my poems, I have taken this on board and would be happy to discuss it in more detail...but this is about your poem which I adore...I love the way you provoke empathy in the reader by focusing on the thoughts of one woman and her pets...
only in a world so cold
can we point fingers
at one another
in ironic hypocrisy
and scream out "inactive!"
only in a world this cold."
Favourite stanzas. I hope this begins to thaw this world the way it thawed my heart. Outstanding....