I really liked this poem alot. I mean i have a story about this actually that just reminded me of it. Well today i go to two different schools for different things and today because i take Graphic Disign and this girl name Helena not even kidden she told me how her friend backstabbed her and stuff last year so now she has no friends at all at her normal school and i feel so bad so i'm trying to help now but this poem just reminded me of that. But anyway amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.
This so accurately depicts the feeligns of loneliness, longing, etc.. meter and flow was great...i realy dont have much critique, regretfully.. but i did really like this.. keep writing for sure.. im not homeright now, but id be glad to read more once i get home.. pZ out =O)
I think you did a good job, i know how that feels, its a terrible feeling.. my mom keeps me in a cage that i call home all the time, and i have no one to talk to or hang out with, so its very lonely, and i have to stay in a very small room, all by myself because my brother gets me introuble, this poem was really true, i can relate to it alot, good job, 5/5