Comments : LONELY

  • 12 years ago

    by Gesselle Valle

    Lonely? That's the way that I feel right now....:-( really touching an dcute poem. Nice job 5/5 take care and keep it up.

  • 12 years ago

    by XxTeArSxX17

    I love the flow it kicks @$$. amazing i love the last few lines keep up the good work
    5.5

  • 12 years ago

    by erely

    Very good work

  • 12 years ago

    by Jamie

    Okay lets see

    1st stanza: good until the last line

    2nd stanza: was my least favorite needs work

    3rd stanza:amazing....seriously i mean that really good

    4th stanza: completly lost and confused me it rhymed and flowed wonderfully but confusing none the less which is okay, im okay with being confused poetry isn't always meant to be understood

    so overall 4/5 could using a little touching up!

  • 12 years ago

    by HansRik

    Needless to say, wonderful poem. Though some touches might make it perfect, it is still wonderful. You are an excellent writer. Keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by SexMeister69

    Very good girl. Your poem was just great, very descriptive, and I like it. Keep it up! But, youcan still make it better. Jamie gave some good advice.

  • 12 years ago

    by Andrea

    Very good. the title went good with the poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Ooo, thems fightin' words, arent they? nice poem, i like the ryming scheme you used. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Katlynn

    I really liked this poem alot. I mean i have a story about this actually that just reminded me of it. Well today i go to two different schools for different things and today because i take Graphic Disign and this girl name Helena not even kidden she told me how her friend backstabbed her and stuff last year so now she has no friends at all at her normal school and i feel so bad so i'm trying to help now but this poem just reminded me of that. But anyway amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

  • 12 years ago

    by Katlynn

    I just spelled that wrong oopps...Design lol sorry

  • 12 years ago

    by NannO

    Wow.. this was pretty amazing, too.. i lykd r topic, not many i hv checked out wer about this kind of friendship or from this perspective.. i lykd ur rhyme
    keep goin

  • 12 years ago

    by kiesha

    I really it. You did a great job on this one too. I totally understand how you feel, I can relate to this. It stinks. I'm sorry you have to feel this way. Keep your head up. Take care.
    > Kiesha

  • "A friend is like a parachute,
    if they weren't there for you the first time
    chances are .. you won't be needing them again.
    "

  • Cute, i liked it alot.
    xxx cici xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    This so accurately depicts the feeligns of loneliness, longing, etc.. meter and flow was great...i realy dont have much critique, regretfully.. but i did really like this.. keep writing for sure.. im not homeright now, but id be glad to read more once i get home.. pZ out =O)

  • 12 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    Very good nice flow to it you are very good.5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Justin

    I think you did a good job, i know how that feels, its a terrible feeling.. my mom keeps me in a cage that i call home all the time, and i have no one to talk to or hang out with, so its very lonely, and i have to stay in a very small room, all by myself because my brother gets me introuble, this poem was really true, i can relate to it alot, good job, 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    This poem really spoke to me because I've been at that point in my life for quite a while. Nice work, I like the ideas, continue to explore them and try for some more descriptive line. Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by martha shaw

    Nice flow