Oh my sweet Jesus!,,,I...I....I...what do I say!? Luanne you hit this poem right on..the hammer straight on the nail!!...This poem needs no work or suggestions..It was so perfectly written!! I have to say it was a little creepy because I started to write a poem EXACTLY like this one..i mean down to the bone EXACT!..it is a little different..sorta the same ending because mine has to do with a call, but that is so weird how...oh man I have goosebumps! I could go on with my blabbering but will stop at...THIS WAS A GREAT WRITE!
I loved it and love you,
WOW! that was amazing! I wish I could wright like that! and what actually really touched me was that I am too still waiting for that phone call!(like that'll ever happen he choses to leave and from, what I hear, I'm glad he did! AAAAHHHH! I'm babbling again sorry) but great poem it was very touching:)
Oh my god! this is the best poem i've read in ages. firstly its a great story line...i mean, that part where she's about to kill herself and then her dad rings the phone...that was brillient. this poem had emotion, depth and wonderfully intelligent writing. usually around now i say my favorite stanza, but i can't decide. if you get a chance could you read some of mine, i'd really like to hear your opinion...maybe you could give me some pointers, lol.