Dam* nice, i like the metaphor and comparison you use in the iceberg, nice, figurative elements you used, really good powerful and in simple words, we need more poems like that, great job 5/5 ttyl PeAcE OuT

~RiCo SmootH~

Thank you guys for the comments and im glad you like it.
~David

I love your use of imagery. And I know what you're talking about. The funny thing about ice is you just keep slipping no matter how hard you try to hang on...

Good work.

This poem showed a lot of ur feelings n how u felt it made me feel wht u where goin through gr8 job 5/5

What you truly need is a hug

Beautifully written! This poem is amazing from beginning to end! Truly an astonishing write!

I really liked this poem.
The first one I've read by you.
It is very good.

Love Alixia

Great poem..really exceptional.
i felt like i could've read more though.,.i was so into it.
Take care oxxo

Awesome. Very meaningful. 5/5

-Taylor

Wonderful.. Yes it takes a long time to forget someone.. special

Wonderful.. Yes it takes a long time to forget someone.. special

Amazing poem is was extremely deep especially from a male point of view. Very nice flow until the end where it seemed like you kind of changed speeds in the beginning I was not completely sure what you were talking about which made the words that much more meaningful yet in the last four lines it kind of duled out.
I hope you like my honest opinion

Much Luv -VICKIE-
voted 5/5

Oh baby, sweetie, my heart is crying for you, and your poem is bringing me to tears. You sound like you have such a sweet tender heart, that is now in many little pieces. It is not fair to have the person you love leave you. My boyfriend just recently left me without even saying goodbye and now he is going out with some else and shows off all the time. I know loosing someone hurts a lot, most times it feels like I will never be able to love again. If you want to talk or just vent you are welcome to do so. You could also start a thread in the disscusion place for sad and depressing things. I am sure if you asked for help with this you would get a lot of advice. I wish I could give you a hug hun, and I am so sorry you are in pain. 5/5.

-Mikochan

David, that was a great peice. I liked the emotion and depth you put into it. Good work sweetie! I hope all is well.

-Jennifer.

Overall Rating: 4/5

Merry Christmas, and a Happy New Year!

Hay... this is an absolutely amazing poems..i sympathise =)..lol..keep writing..your good..feel free to check out my poems sometime...
X lonelynow X

I saw your post on one of the discusiions and though I would check out some of your work..This is a good poem =D

That was good. Third stanza wasn't as strong as the rest of it but overall the piece was interesting.
~The Unforgiven

Yo! this is HotNess!!!!
good job on this drop!

BX Girl

The first two stanzas are my favorite.

Ooh you edited it, I like this revision alot. One thing deciet......i think it has a p in it like 'deciept' Its wonderful, if anything I like it more, revision and taking heed of advice (if you did that) always improves poems, and those that listen become poets of all.