Longing To Be In Your Arms,
Longing To Feel Your Body Next To Mine
Wanting You Makes Life Harder And Harder To Live,
The Very Moment You Are In My Arms
I Would Cherish,
Cherish Every Moment With All My Heart
Making Every Minute Last Longer And Better Than The Minute Before.
Once We're Together I Know That Life Would Be Better,
I'd Live The Fantasy Of Us Together Forever
I think you could have broken it up a bit and it does leave a lot to the imagination. Maybe add a few more words to describe it. Other wise, yest it is a great poem and it does show what you meant to say and maybe what readers think it means. 4/5
I give this the same rating, and same comment as the other one. this is a nice poem, but it has little detail, and leaves ALOT to the imagination...theres not much information. i think u could go far with this poem, if you work with it, and try to add sum descriptive words, very little effort is needed to make this poem better. but dont get me wrong, it is good.