I appreciate, above all other aspects, is your ability to open and conclude your poems so strongly.

Kalika

I really loved this one. It was so good.
fav line; "Here in my heart-broken hell" I don't know what it was about this one, But I just loved it. It was really strong and had alot of emotion within it. Keep it up 5/5
`natalie x-x

This is nice. i love the last lines.

Give me a short story to tell,
For death the future brings.

AMAZING

This is really good! it's really strong...5/5

:o wow.. I have to say, I am speachless.. I mean, you use words that just make the reader amazed. Excellent

A short but meaningful story, just as the title says. I love how you relate heartbreak to dying, that's how it feels, lol. It's great, 5/5

The line "the futures not for me" should be "the future's not for me" :D

Other wise...I thought you must have put your soul into this poem, there os so much imagery and different idea all apilling out...
I really liked the line: "Where living is but vain,"
So sad and powerful
:)

Seriously, I normally hate love poems, I find them hard to read. But yours are simply fantastic, I wanted to pick a favourite line but there's too many to point out. You write beautifully it's really a treat to read. So keep writing :D

Hey, another great one here, only think i might suggest changing is where you say
"Where living is but vain"
to
"where living is but in vain"

other than that, it was perfect.
it reads very nicely, again, great word usage. you really know how to express your emotions beautifully. great work! another 5! :)

If you write like this all the time like WOW> :).. The poems I've read so far have been amazing and this a true example of what I think amazing is! So much pain in this short story. So meaningful and a powerful message. Dont ever hesitate to ask me to read any new poems. Awesome JOB! =)

--emotionless.19*

You did another amazing write!! It was so beautifully written!!

"Give me a short story to tell,
For death the future brings"

These are my favorite lines!! So amazing!! 6/5!! Wouldnt change a thing!!!

Wow.. that was so beautiful and i can so relate! amazing work! 5/5

Another excellent flowing poem, nice usage of words

Yea

Omg..
i love this..
its great..
describes my life PERFECTLY.. ♥

I loved this poem! The rhyme scheme flowed smoothly and you used some very descriptive words...keep up the good work!

That poem is so cool...sad but still cool.

I really like this poem its really good !!! cheak mine out some time and commet them thanx!
<3

Nice poem! Love It!!