Comments : Dreamer: Be As You Are

  • 12 years ago

    by GR33N3Y3DB3AUTY

    Really good and interestng and it makes u think

  • 12 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Ooh I liked the twist on the last line from "she" to "you." I think you used some lovely and powerful descriptions that really painted an image in my mind. I found it a very touching write indeed. On the first line of the last stanza I think you're missing "were."
    Well done, very well written.

  • 12 years ago

    by Sole

    Your poem paints such beautiful imagery, the 'glass road' its so sad! But I know just how the person in the poem feels, I would love to live in amongst nature, in peace :)

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 12 years ago

    by mkml

    Thanks for commenting mine. =]

    This poem was great. I like how you described everything. It really painted a picture in my mind and I could see what you were telling me.

    Overall, I really liked it. Awesome job,
    and keep writing so I have more to read.


  • 12 years ago

    by StefQ

    WoW my imagination is going crazy lol i adored this poem espacially this :"Blue eyes sad like the ocean longing for the faith of the sea." i don't know why but that touched me the most! another great job :)


  • 12 years ago

    by Natalie

    Thats really good. You used alot of good words to describe things. It sounded perfect! Loved it! 5/5

    luv natalie x-x

    P.s Sorry for the late comments, Ive been a bit busy lately.

  • 12 years ago

    by azlan26

    "Dying inside without the light of flames igniting her world" and the last line really stuck out for me
    Be as you are wow those words are really caught up in my mind now
    Keep writing :D:D

  • 12 years ago

    by Daze

    Another great one I ahve to say, very creative, and the words you used were captivating, like a dreamer your poems are so imaginary, it's like you think of places, feelings and gracefully put them in wrods great job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenny

    A great poem, thoughtfully written, with great description, with deep meaning aswell, great! Keep writing!!

  • 12 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    Very touching. 5/5

    and i will fix my "I's" in my poems
    i just started writing.

  • 12 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Beautiful... Natural... Soft & sublte, yet you got your meaning across. Good use of imagery and techniques. Once again I'm blown away.
    5/5 (again)
    As always~ Kate

  • 12 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    Not my type of poetry but I see where you're coming from.

  • 12 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    Very good, I didn't see any problems, and I liked the message the last two lines really brought it together I think.

  • 12 years ago

    by LiL K

    Again, great poem! I really like how you described how this person feels. I dunno if you're describing you or someone else from your point of view...either way, it was an awesome poem!

    "Dying inside without the light of flames igniting her world.
    Couldn’t see that girl who lived within her. Who they saw." ... I like how you worded that...good job, very touching 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by holly

    I liked this and it was very original nice imagery and description, really liked it xx ALLY xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Laura Ash

    I loved how you described everything. Like "sun-kissed hair" & "pastel skin"

  • 12 years ago

    by Angie

    Oh I truly love this one...... always be who you are, don't be who you're not. Its ok to dream and to follow those dreams too as long as you do as you! Wonderful write..........

  • 12 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    Great write

    Beautiful word choice nice rythm


  • 12 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    WOW great job as usual all i can say is wow 5/5


  • 12 years ago

    by Laura

    Another great write. I believe there is a lil girl like that inside all women.
    Once again you have the amazing ability to portray how others may be feeling. Please checkout some of my favorites!