You know i've got to say, your poems are the most imaginative poems i've ever read. Just the way you word them, makes me think and I get this image in my head of whats going on. To be able to do that is a hard skill to achieve and you've done it.
This poem was beautiful! Nice use of vocabulary and structure. You expressed every line with such emotion and depth. You definately have a talent. Keep up the fantastic work! 5/5
The use of short sentances hammers in every single point. It makes it seems like nothing else is on your mind and also gives the impression of being factual.
Differering the very last line to make it more personal was also extremely effective.
12 years ago
by Tara Kay
You are so talented Kaylee, keep writing, i love your work