Comments : Sweet Amy Was Told...

  • 11 years ago

    by Jacob Perry

    I liked this poem alot i espeacially liked the lines "Golden ring matching the
    spirit you have risen in me.
    Sun setting on the morning’s past
    and the tomorrows still to be."
    it was excellent and sweet but had a sad feel to it as well. quite good all in all :)
    ~jacob

  • 11 years ago

    by PS

    Lovly. you combined the emotions really well and of course your word choice is amazing. :) nice job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Angie

    I am speechless...... a beautiful story, very inspirational piece.... it flowed well and keeps the reader interested until the very end...... well done sweetie, well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    Wow... you really are talented. This was amazing. It's actually the best love poem I have read... and I'm usually not the type to like love poems. But this one is an exception... 5/5

    ~ Tina

  • 11 years ago

    by Kim

    I loved it! The story was so beautiful and flow *sigh* You have so much talent, keep writing, I love reading your wonderful poems!

  • 11 years ago

    by Maiya

    Beautiful imagery my dear :). I love the very last line 'Sweet Amy will you marry me' it's amazing!
    Maiya

  • 11 years ago

    by Timeless Hopeful

    This poem was beautiful.

    It's different (by the way you wrote it) and unique (by the person you described). One suggestion:

    Ten year old Amy was sitting on
    the edge of her bed that morning.
    Brush running through those
    golden curls then falling, to the bed
    Staring through the window.
    (A comma would make this stanza flow after falling)

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    You have this talented to create wicked imagery. Poem is sad but beautiful. I have often thought about writing a poem like this.
    However I write mostly end rhyme poems (trying to expand my skills tho) so I find it really difficult to write in this style...but you have the skillz girl!!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Sole

    Beautiful - Loved every second of it. The repetition was really effective, and the ending was so happy! I thought it would be really sad - but it was beautiful!

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 11 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Wonderful! A beautifull written, remarkable piece! Fantastic story conveyed so nicely in poetry :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Beautifully written, you are a true poet. I loved the way you used repitition though out the poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Great job!! I loved how it told her story!!! You did great details in it to!! I love it when i dont have to wonder because someone didnt think it all the way threw!! You did an excellent job on this one 5/5

    keep it up!!

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 11 years ago

    by Angie

    Wonderful! I luved it, it was very well written and had a lot of deth and meaning. I like you style, its different. Nicely done. It flowed well together. I really like the lines:

    "Tears falling down your face
    and splashing on the worn blanket.
    With the medicine we have
    inside these bottles,
    we feel you have a chance.
    Sweet Amy was told."

    It just stuck out to me, interesting to say the least. Keep up the awesome work. 5/5
    ~Luvz~
    ~Angie~
    xoxo

  • 11 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    Im speechless

    beautiful. just...
    exquisit. so so beutiful

    Ruby

  • 11 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    This was phenomenal from start to finish. What I love about your poetry is that it is so carefully crafted and every word ooozes emotion. It was an enticing poem and very moving. You were right to change it to inspirational because you and your magnificent poetry do just that for me....inspire...

    [lostlaureate - come find me]

  • 11 years ago

    by SilentDreams

    When i saw this the length put me off but the stanzas helped. I liked the use of imagery but i kind of stopped following it in the middle because it seemed pretty much all the same. I like most of your work, saying that this is not one of my favourites. (personnel taste)

  • 11 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Wow, very thought-provoking and inspirational but it was too long to include in my contest, i loved it though, keep writing xx

  • 11 years ago

    by LostInLife!

    Wow, when i started reading i was unsure of what to think, but after reaching the end, i was pleased i taken time to read, very nice poem i like the imagination you have used
    great job
    jemma xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by StefQ

    I loved the imagination in this poem and the last stanza just made me smile lol :) amzing poem written by an amazing poet :) 5/5
    now let's read part 2 lol

    ~StefQ

  • 11 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    Great story
    great wording
    great imagery

    superb write

    ~GLASS~