I liked this poem alot i espeacially liked the lines "Golden ring matching the
spirit you have risen in me.
Sun setting on the morningâ€™s past
and the tomorrows still to be."
it was excellent and sweet but had a sad feel to it as well. quite good all in all :)
It's different (by the way you wrote it) and unique (by the person you described). One suggestion:
Ten year old Amy was sitting on
the edge of her bed that morning.
Brush running through those
golden curls then falling, to the bed
Staring through the window.
(A comma would make this stanza flow after falling)
You have this talented to create wicked imagery. Poem is sad but beautiful. I have often thought about writing a poem like this.
However I write mostly end rhyme poems (trying to expand my skills tho) so I find it really difficult to write in this style...but you have the skillz girl!!!!
Great job!! I loved how it told her story!!! You did great details in it to!! I love it when i dont have to wonder because someone didnt think it all the way threw!! You did an excellent job on this one 5/5
This was phenomenal from start to finish. What I love about your poetry is that it is so carefully crafted and every word ooozes emotion. It was an enticing poem and very moving. You were right to change it to inspirational because you and your magnificent poetry do just that for me....inspire...
When i saw this the length put me off but the stanzas helped. I liked the use of imagery but i kind of stopped following it in the middle because it seemed pretty much all the same. I like most of your work, saying that this is not one of my favourites. (personnel taste)