I liked the metaphore in this.
Normally, I'm not a fan of short lines. but your rhyming really pulled me in.
I liked it. A lot. Your vocabulary was simple.. but overall, it was really nice.
The story unfolded greatly.
Really nice poem.
The flow was good and the rhymes were great.
I liked the storyline though very sad.
One of the things that make this poem stand out is the fact that you used some rather unique descriptions. ( Her home life was a battle zone, / parents fighting world war three.)
I love this...the depth and emotion you put into this piece was beautiful.
The imagery you portrayed creates very vivid pictures for the reader and the flow is good throughout.
The only suggestion I would have for this is to try and eliminate some of ther filler words (I, you, she, and, etc)
but other than that, this was beautifully and elegantly written.