Comments : When Forever Ends

  • 11 years ago

    by smile

    Wow how sad
    this poem is truely beautiful,
    i loved every last line
    genius
    well done!5/5

    xXxXcomment/rate meXxXx

    --smile--

  • 11 years ago

    by Carrie

    This poem is sad... but it is amazing.. I loved it... it was really really good... 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by MuRdErFaCe

    That is a very good poem. I really enjoyed it, it was good. Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by charlee

    Holy shit!!!!
    this is the most best poem that i have ever read!!...this is so good u should publish it!!!..it sweet!!

    with love/charlee

  • 11 years ago

    by Katasha logsdon

    WOW...great poem..you have to keep writting ..i love your poems 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by oOo Candi Mami oOO

    Omg this is reaLLy goOd..iitsz reaLLy sAd...thatsz why im scared to faLL in lovE..i dOnt wAnt to end up hurt like the gurL in the stOry..

  • 11 years ago

    by LiSa

    Oh my god this really touched me my ex said the exact same thing to me and it took all i had to keep he gun from my heaad or the blade from my wrist

  • 11 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Oh wow. It was beautiful. tears filled my eyes. It was soo great the last line ended it so perfectly. And i no exactly what that feels like! Wow. i dont even no what to say it was soo good!!

    5/5

    Amberinaa*

  • 11 years ago

    by Danielle

    This poem was beautifully sad. it was really thought provoking! 5/5. comment on some of my work :) xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Becca

    Wow that was very deep..

  • 10 years ago

    by Fear2love

    Soso sad, which i like alot, lol.

  • 10 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    I liked the metaphore in this.
    Normally, I'm not a fan of short lines. but your rhyming really pulled me in.
    I liked it. A lot. Your vocabulary was simple.. but overall, it was really nice.
    The story unfolded greatly.

    You did a nice job. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by I love you always and today

    Omg i love this poem so much your honestly a great poet in a death situation but i love it a lot

  • 10 years ago

    by My Decadent

    Really nice poem.
    The flow was good and the rhymes were great.
    I liked the storyline though very sad.
    One of the things that make this poem stand out is the fact that you used some rather unique descriptions. ( Her home life was a battle zone, / parents fighting world war three.)
    Good work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this...the depth and emotion you put into this piece was beautiful.
    The imagery you portrayed creates very vivid pictures for the reader and the flow is good throughout.
    The only suggestion I would have for this is to try and eliminate some of ther filler words (I, you, she, and, etc)
    but other than that, this was beautifully and elegantly written.

  • 10 years ago

    by QuietStorm

    Thats beautiful I loved your flow. And you kept me interested till thee end, and thats what its about keeping your readers attention.

  • 10 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    Wow. It wasnt boring at all! sometimes poems that long get boring..but that one didn't! i loved it, it was so deep and (my fav word) meaningful!

  • 10 years ago

    by HalfwayBetween

    Wow i really liked it.....it was sad but great .......loved the note that she wrote

  • 10 years ago

    by Nonna

    This is so sad..but i liked it so much,great work

  • 10 years ago

    by Airika

    Once again all i can say is WOOOOOWWWWW!!!!! SWEET =]