That's just as good as the first part.

This was good like really Good I liked it alot!!! ___0_o bye

No offence but just too christian for me..
the writting itself was exalent thank you for the violent imigery

Christian? How is it christian? Besides the mentioning of God and Satan, but this is just a fictional story. Like if it were an elf and a dragon. I didn't write it to be christian. I wrote it for a story. About an angel and her life. I don't write religious poems thank you. Have a nice day.

Damn..u do hv some powerful imagination my dear friend....this ring thing just seemed to be so real and with the way u expressed this whole thing....its scary...brilliant write indeed

all the best and take care
5/5

Wow that poem was really good

Best second half aswell it really is an amazing poem xox ^^pickle^^

Please remember to use apostrophes when writing contractions like "it's". :)

Just as good as the first part.
this was amazing

Well, I most definitely got confused there! maybe it's just me, i don't know! but half of it i understood and half of it didnt! but over all it was a great poem!

Someone could make that a horror movie! It was so long but I loved every bit of it. Awesome. Just because of this piece, I HAVE TO ADD YOU TO MY FAVORITES. I love it. Keep it up.

>black&&blue

Wow. That was amazing also. You used excellent vocab and you kept my attention from start to finish. Excellent job. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

I didn't find it as strong as the first part but it was very well written nonetheless. I didn't expect the ending but it was very fitting.
Excellent poece of work.

The constant rhymign really helps the pace and flow of this poem...an excellent piece of work tho a bit wordy in places adn maybe would be better if it were shorter...

-biscuit-

Brittney --
Honey, I can seriously not see how anyone could have NOT given this a 5/5. It was terrific, better than the first one. I knew it was going to be another terrific poem when I got to the second line of the first stanza - that was really good thinking. You`re an amazing writer - I`ll probably be commenting on more of your work in the near future! Again, the rhyming and flow of this was perfect. Keep up this writing, and tell me when you get some new poetry out! I`ll definitely take a look. 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Ohmygoodness-gracious. That was so long, doesn't matter though, this poem, is amazing. I really loved it. I could careless if it was longer. It was amazingly done. I don't think anyone could make one as dark and as long as this and be better, I purely think it would take them ages or it would be horrid. Honestly, I am at a lose of words, this poem is just... Wow.. seriously I loved it. I might even read it again. You should write another long one like this. I would love to read another one of them. Ha, seriously you are amazingly talanted.

Now that I have rambled on about how amazing your poem was, I think I should shutup and stop being annoying. Hehe.

Wow this is as good as the first one! 5/5

I loved this one, i found it flowed a bit better than the last one, but still, in places the flow is interupted by lines that are too long, maybe take a few minutes to read it out loud and you'll see where the problem lines are. I did find one typo in the poem: "Please no, you promise me you wouldnt!" I think it should be "promised".

--Steph

BY:Taylor(Rosie's friend)

I loved your poem and i think you should send one of those to a publisher and have them print it.I know one and if your intrested i can have him check out your site. his name is Bob ****.Sorry can't give last name but maybe he'll comment.He just started a book of poems about poeple being beat and stuff. WELL anyways write rosie and she'll give me a call.oh and how i know him so well is he is my moms x.and he'd do any thing for me so i'll see what i can do if you want me to.
sign,
Taylor

Wow, i am just stunned. i couldnt take my eyes of either part, they were spectacular. well written, flowed smoothly, flawless. awesome job.
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