Christian? How is it christian? Besides the mentioning of God and Satan, but this is just a fictional story. Like if it were an elf and a dragon. I didn't write it to be christian. I wrote it for a story. About an angel and her life. I don't write religious poems thank you. Have a nice day.
Honey, I can seriously not see how anyone could have NOT given this a 5/5. It was terrific, better than the first one. I knew it was going to be another terrific poem when I got to the second line of the first stanza - that was really good thinking. You`re an amazing writer - I`ll probably be commenting on more of your work in the near future! Again, the rhyming and flow of this was perfect. Keep up this writing, and tell me when you get some new poetry out! I`ll definitely take a look. 5/5
Ohmygoodness-gracious. That was so long, doesn't matter though, this poem, is amazing. I really loved it. I could careless if it was longer. It was amazingly done. I don't think anyone could make one as dark and as long as this and be better, I purely think it would take them ages or it would be horrid. Honestly, I am at a lose of words, this poem is just... Wow.. seriously I loved it. I might even read it again. You should write another long one like this. I would love to read another one of them. Ha, seriously you are amazingly talanted.
Now that I have rambled on about how amazing your poem was, I think I should shutup and stop being annoying. Hehe.
I loved this one, i found it flowed a bit better than the last one, but still, in places the flow is interupted by lines that are too long, maybe take a few minutes to read it out loud and you'll see where the problem lines are. I did find one typo in the poem: "Please no, you promise me you wouldnt!" I think it should be "promised".
I loved your poem and i think you should send one of those to a publisher and have them print it.I know one and if your intrested i can have him check out your site. his name is Bob ****.Sorry can't give last name but maybe he'll comment.He just started a book of poems about poeple being beat and stuff. WELL anyways write rosie and she'll give me a call.oh and how i know him so well is he is my moms x.and he'd do any thing for me so i'll see what i can do if you want me to.