Comments : Death (Part Two)

  • 11 years ago

    by Evil love

    That's just as good as the first part.

  • 11 years ago

    by FranFran

    This was good like really Good I liked it alot!!! ___0_o bye

  • 11 years ago

    by Fallen-AS-Angels do!

    No offence but just too christian for me..
    the writting itself was exalent thank you for the violent imigery

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Christian? How is it christian? Besides the mentioning of God and Satan, but this is just a fictional story. Like if it were an elf and a dragon. I didn't write it to be christian. I wrote it for a story. About an angel and her life. I don't write religious poems thank you. Have a nice day.

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Damn..u do hv some powerful imagination my dear friend....this ring thing just seemed to be so real and with the way u expressed this whole thing....its scary...brilliant write indeed

    all the best and take care
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by dyingxpassion

    Wow that poem was really good

  • 11 years ago

    by xxpinkxxribbonsxx

    Best second half aswell it really is an amazing poem xox ^^pickle^^

  • 11 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Please remember to use apostrophes when writing contractions like "it's". :)

  • 11 years ago

    by jello

    Just as good as the first part.
    this was amazing

  • 11 years ago

    by Nelle

    Well, I most definitely got confused there! maybe it's just me, i don't know! but half of it i understood and half of it didnt! but over all it was a great poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Someone could make that a horror movie! It was so long but I loved every bit of it. Awesome. Just because of this piece, I HAVE TO ADD YOU TO MY FAVORITES. I love it. Keep it up.

    >black&&blue

  • Wow. That was amazing also. You used excellent vocab and you kept my attention from start to finish. Excellent job. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    I didn't find it as strong as the first part but it was very well written nonetheless. I didn't expect the ending but it was very fitting.
    Excellent poece of work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Biscuit

    The constant rhymign really helps the pace and flow of this poem...an excellent piece of work tho a bit wordy in places adn maybe would be better if it were shorter...

    -biscuit-

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Brittney --
    Honey, I can seriously not see how anyone could have NOT given this a 5/5. It was terrific, better than the first one. I knew it was going to be another terrific poem when I got to the second line of the first stanza - that was really good thinking. You`re an amazing writer - I`ll probably be commenting on more of your work in the near future! Again, the rhyming and flow of this was perfect. Keep up this writing, and tell me when you get some new poetry out! I`ll definitely take a look. 5/5

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Ohmygoodness-gracious. That was so long, doesn't matter though, this poem, is amazing. I really loved it. I could careless if it was longer. It was amazingly done. I don't think anyone could make one as dark and as long as this and be better, I purely think it would take them ages or it would be horrid. Honestly, I am at a lose of words, this poem is just... Wow.. seriously I loved it. I might even read it again. You should write another long one like this. I would love to read another one of them. Ha, seriously you are amazingly talanted.

    Now that I have rambled on about how amazing your poem was, I think I should shutup and stop being annoying. Hehe.

  • 11 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow this is as good as the first one! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    I loved this one, i found it flowed a bit better than the last one, but still, in places the flow is interupted by lines that are too long, maybe take a few minutes to read it out loud and you'll see where the problem lines are. I did find one typo in the poem: "Please no, you promise me you wouldnt!" I think it should be "promised".

    --Steph

  • 11 years ago

    by Rosie

    BY:Taylor(Rosie's friend)

    I loved your poem and i think you should send one of those to a publisher and have them print it.I know one and if your intrested i can have him check out your site. his name is Bob ****.Sorry can't give last name but maybe he'll comment.He just started a book of poems about poeple being beat and stuff. WELL anyways write rosie and she'll give me a call.oh and how i know him so well is he is my moms x.and he'd do any thing for me so i'll see what i can do if you want me to.
    sign,
    Taylor

  • 11 years ago

    by Driver

    Wow, i am just stunned. i couldnt take my eyes of either part, they were spectacular. well written, flowed smoothly, flawless. awesome job.
    Driver