This is very written throughout with some strong content which is very well portrayed and clearly conveyed to the reader. The plot is well told with a lot of powerful expression and no areas of weakness nor areas which overpower the remainder. Overall a well written balanced piece with some fantastic content.
The final stanza is fantastically written. The first 2 lines of it are especially powerful and the other 2 finish off the poem wonderfully.

Great piece

5/5

Wow amazing poem so powerful and moving
you are an amazing writer and have such a great talent
greatwork keep it up =]
stay strong
5/5
lovelove
Alice
xxxx
i look forward to reading more of your wonderful work =]

"Poison running through my blood which you caused to start."
[which you 'helped' start]
It didn't make sense reading it with caused in there.

Wow, Nat, this was a really scary poem. I was really confused after the stanza with the knight, because I didn't know if it was the knight who raped her or someone else. Because 'he' saved 'you' from 'her' , I just thought it was weird 'he' would rape 'you. Well anyways, it was really sad, and I hope nothing of this sort has happened!.. I would have to kick someone's butt. Great stuff Nat, probably one of the most intense, and emotional pieces you have written. Definitely worth the 2 for 1 deal : P

At first I just glanced at this but when I read it, it's trying to make me cry. I am serious.

Wow, Nat.. is this true? =/

scary stuff. indeed.

i love you, hun. keep your head up.

*huggles tight*

good piece. =)

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Great imagery, wonderful rhymes, very sad poem.

Wow Natalie you are such a beautiful writer! So much better than I am, I love the way you just put together words and they mean so much because they have the perfect flow and meaning. I really understood what you meant in this poem because I went through similar situations when I was younger and growing up. I hope if you need anything you would talk to me because I relate. The poem was very emotional to me...a masterpiece. Keep up your beautiful work. 5/5

Of wanting to leave this horrible world that God designed.
^^ hard to believe it didn't use to be so horrible..but now things have gotten worse!

His hands were smothering me, unable to breathe,
Screaming and yelling, wishing that he would leave.
Choking my throat so tight that I couldn't escape,
Pleading to him please no, this is wrong, this is rape.
^^ this stanza hit me hard because I can picture that, and in just a movie I have a hard time watching it, it makes me cry and especially to read it...bone-chilling write hear Taleee! Hope its not true!
-Krissey

Wow..just wow..have i told you you are a great writer...this was by far one of the best of yours that i have read...i loved it, just loved it! i can relate so that is what makes me love it even more!! you really do have talent babe 5/5

Wow, this poems is very powerful, but very well written. I really liked it. It kept you wanting to read and grasp what was going on and what was soon to happen. Great job writing this. I give it a 5/5

♥Nickie

Like usual amazing ^^ i hope this isn't true but i really liked it, it was well written and even if it wasn't true i think ya scared all of us good job =)

Awesome poem,brought back some bad memories,but everytime you face it you heal a bit.

Your poem is aweosme, your an awesome writer and i have no critisism for you.(you are that good) If you want to comment mine, then i would appreciate it, but it's up to you. I didnt write this to get something in return, i wrote it because your poem touched me.

The world sure can be cruel, I agree on that, as lame as it sounds, there is always light in the end of the darkest tunnel.

Keep up your writing! Very enjoyable to read!

Omg! this is...its amazing. it is ver y deep and you espressed it well. i would never be comfortable sharing this with someone. So congrats! you are a great writer. keep it up!

This poem is Mind-blowing really, the flow is just remarkable, it floats off the tongue, the rhyme is a very huge plus, The message portrayed is very strong and you deliver it in a strong professional and emotional manner, this is truly the best i have read.

Amazing. That simple. So full of emotion. I can't even describe it!

5/5 for sure.

joy*:.xx

Not much to say about this one but AWESOME!! great job 5/5

Wow Nat, wow. I loved this poem so much i really hope it's not a true story, that would be horrible, i loved the way the first and last stanzas were the same. And i loved this part:

His hands were smothering me, unable to breathe,
Screaming and yelling, wishing that he would leave.
Choking my throat so tight that I couldn't escape,
Pleading to him please no, this is wrong, this is rape.

This poem flowed so well, great work, keep it up.

-Steph

That had such a strangely really good hook. Watch out for this line,

"Releasing me from her prison, setting me free."

Perhaps the 'her' is suppose to be my. Keep it consistant with the point of view. Otherwise this had been a wonderful read. Liked the images and just the overall way that it flowed etc. Nice job and really, really good word choice for this piece.
~Faith