This was REALLY great! Wow, just, wow. I really liked the repitition of the last two lines of each stanza -- it added a cool effect. Not to mention, the title was very catchy. I think its probably one of the best poems I`ve read on this site, WONDERFUL job! 5/5
Wow Nat! Now that I've read this I realize how much I miss reading your wonderful poetry. Sorry for not commenting lately, I've been quite busy. This poem was so amazing, especially the title, I think it's brilliant. It was so unique and beautiful because you turned a simple and unusual poetry topic into a masterpiece of power. Keep up your excellent work! 5/5 xxx
Aww, wow, taleee.. that was amazing hun.. and so sad.. wow.. the descriptions were stunning, they literally left me speechless.. the flow is perfect and i love the repitition of the last two lines in each stanza.. ily, hunny! 5/5
I saw your comment on my poem of the same name, and decided i'd come to read yours. =] It's amazing how two people can write a poem, with the same title, and yet each are so different. You did an excellent job, such emotion and the story you told through the poem is well written. i love how the last two lines are repeticious, and it always works. My favorite line is:
Her lips are shaking from the words that she can't say.
I love everything about this poem! =]