Make you he know that you really do care,
[I think you meant 'sure' in there]
and that you will never play
[This was a poor line...Too overly used with every other poem.]
to some love is a dream,
[This line was perfect.]
In other words, I enjoyed the poem. Trying to write a love poem for me is extremely hard and never turns out to what I'm feeling.. Now I know why. Great job.
This is a unique take on love and life-very emotional and eloquently expressed.As criticism-stanza #4 the last line seems awkward, especially since you already used the rhyme 'play', perhaps something like 'and that you will always stay'-just a thought.Stanzas 1, 3, 5, 6, & 7 are truly outstanding-very well written, but it is the meaning and the emotion that really shine through.Really, a great piece.Very heartfelt and beautiful.A realistic yet emotional look at love.