I like it, but the last line kind of confuses me, I mean I can grasp a meaning, but I'm pretty sure it's not the one you were meaning. Oh well... I still like the poem. Nice word choice and flow. 5/5.

But is pretty good.. 5/5

This was so good i love this part"Her true, passionate love passed away.
And her world turned to black and gray.
With her mourning, she starts to sing.
She concludes her song with a broken wing"i think that is really beutiful i love it

WoW NOW THIS POEM WAS EXCELLENT, i give u a 5/5

Wow this peom was amazing, it completely brain washed me, i felt so into the poem that i didnt even hear my phone (that was right next to me) lol.. you are a very powerful writer, and you created this fantacy atmoshpere around me.. loved it.. truly inspriational... the only thing i would say prehaps that you should think about changing is in the stanza that you wrote 'come' on the second to last line, and 'become' on the last line... but still a 5/5..
please could you read, comment and rate on some of my poems please, it would be much apprechiated.... Kirsty xxx

A good poem! i liked it..i luved the first line though..keep on writing!

Wow good one as soon as i started reading couldnt let me stop

Actually, this poem was not as bad as you think it is. Some of those poems that come off the top of our heads are the best. They usually have a good flow, like this one does. So well done with this one.

Nice poem! I like the last stanza best ^^
5/5

Awww. This poem flowed so well with the rhymes but at times seemed forced, but all and all was good...

This is good, it's defiantly then other poems i read, but i really like it. it may not be one of your best, but it is good. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

I like this good job 5/5

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I like this poem. you can really feel what the writer is trying to get at. Check out my only poem on here right now. it's called Gravity. you may enjoy it :-)

I don't know why you're not overly happy about it, I thought it was great! You had a really nice flow to it. There's nothing I'd change!

Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

I loved this one. It was very good and a definite 5/5

Amazing write!

i loved the ending.. "D

I like this poem it has a good start but im not so sure about the ending. Keep writing.
~Kyra~

Hey, if its alright with you....my friend and i would like to turn ur poem into a song. email me if its ok
dizzy_chick@asurfer.com

u rox!!
addie

Hey, if its alright with you....my friend and i would like to turn ur poem into a song. email me if its ok
dizzy_chick@asurfer.com

u rox!!
addie