Alone

by Brittini   Oct 19, 2006


With no one to turn to
No one who cares
This is how I feel
Like no one there
Left alone to suffer
With the pain that tares
At my now broken heart
Which is soon to be bare

Wondering and thinking
Where did I go wrong?
Different wordings of that question
Repeat in my head like a song

I need someone to listen
I can't deal anymore
I need someone to mend
My heart that's broken and sore

Day after day the more I fall
With all my problems acting as a knife
Stabbing my plans
Ruining my life

Now hiding my problems
My true feelings, all the while
Hoping no one will know
What is behind my fake smile?

As I think of my pain
As my day passes by
A new thought arises
As I start to cry

I now turn to God
With one prayer in mind
I called up to him
And asked for him to be kind
Not at all to me
But to all who have suffered
More then I can believe

I realize have way through all my troubles
The message I must understand
Lessons to be learned all through life
But for me the message at hand
To grow in strength and turn to myself
Because I to have special gifts I can use

Now feeling selfish
To my friends I return
I thank God every day
For that lesson I learned

So now when I'm down
And pain comes my way
I know that others
Have it worse each day

I notice I'm stronger
When the pain does leave
And now I have a message
For others to receive

Don't complain with what you have
Live without regret and sorrow
Take each day as a gift
And now there's always a better tomorrow

I wrote this after a lot of stress and stuff was getting to me so i really wanna hear what people think about it so please comment and if not then at least rate it!! thanks you

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  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Good job.. the flow was a bit off but still another great poem filled with a lot of strong emotion

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    This was a great poem at first it sound kinda whiny but as you read through it the message was right there bam in your face great job keep up the great work Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    With the pain that tares
    [[I think you mean "tears".]]

    Which is soon to be bare
    [[And this just sounds awkward to me.]]

    With all my problems acting as a knife
    Stabbing my plans
    Ruining my life
    [[I'm not sure why; it's cliche, but I like it.]]

    Now hiding my problems
    My true feelings, all the while
    Hoping no one will know
    What is behind my fake smile?
    [[Again, cliche, but I liked it. There's something about your writing that I like. =)]]

    I now turn to God
    With one prayer in mind
    I called up to him
    And asked for him to be kind
    Not at all to me
    But to all who have suffered
    More then I can believe
    [[alghagualja. Oh. My. God. THANK YOU! [[Hugs you.]] I'm so glad someone said this, someone finally got this out and realized this...agasgiasugoaugla!]]

    To my friends I return
    I thank God every day
    For that lesson I learned
    [[Again, beautiful.]]

    I was thinking this was another cliche "I hate myself" poem, yet I got a shock when it wasn't.
    I absoultely adore this for the simple fact that someone finally realized this.
    And there's something about your writing that really makes me like it; I'm not sure why. You write a bit clichely, but again, I don't hate it.
    So.
    I"ll just say keep up the great work and keep writing; you could really do something with your work.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Great write its like a story that i see unfolding infront of me as i read osm job 5/5
    -laura-

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashley Ann

    I LOVE the point that you are putting across! You have such talent! The only thing I recommend is that you read it aloud to yourself. There were some spelling errors or extra words. If you read it aloud to yourself you will catch those errors a lot better. 5/5

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