Hm. This is VERY intersting. I wasn't going to post a comment, but this is simply dumbfounding. It wasn't cliche at all... and the ending was very interesting. One suggestion to make it flawless: Use punctuation. It would help the flow immensly.
Wow. This poem kept me in suspense, and I have to admit that it took my breath away. I really liked the quick, short lines and the rhyming was good as well. I don't know if this was a mockery against the church, or if it was something.. well, I can't exactly say 'good' lol but.. wow. I'm confused now. If you want to send me an email explaining what this poem is about that'd be great. All I can say right now is that I absolutely love this poem.