Comments : In a world of Criticism

  • 10 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great poem, it kept my interest all the way. Very true content, those things still happen. You had a steady flow as well. Keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by dont let go a good thing

    Love it keep writting

  • 10 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Great poem, Seems you have grown up a bit , I was the same way,funny how when we age we look at things in a different perspective. WISDOM LAD5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by X2892

    Excellent poem here it was excellent 2 read, i give it a 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Miss Pipp

    Hun it was excellent. Loved every word. It shows how people change and mature as they grow older. Keep writing =]

    Pip xXx

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Mmm, i did like it, actually i loved it, i thought it was true, to the point, and really catchy. well done
    xxxxxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Esther

    Llol vanity is a sin! n what is right is not always popular! i liked ur poem it was like ful of regret lol! n i found it funni! haha soz i am in a loopy mood today

  • 10 years ago

    by Mousie

    This was a great poem, it really hit home b/c i'm one of those girls that you would make fun of, top of her class, all honors, not blonde but i am pretty skinny and muscular at the same time... lets just say, i'm not as shallow as the other girls, but i do have a lot going for me... great write, it was so true! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. you're message is very strong and clear in this and leaves a huge impact. You have definitely captured the world as it is today. I really liked the last stanza.. it seemed to sum up the poem nicely. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Fruitloop XxProblem ChildxX

    I have a connfession to make...
    im one of thise cheerleaders that chase you and i give mediocore guys the boot. waaa. that was inspiring. i should give all ppl a chance. i nvr rlly thought of it that way. great job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Different, that's what this poem is. It's true, this really does happen in school and I have to live with this everyday right now and I hate it. =[ You did a great job on this one, keep it up! 5/5

    Stephanie

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    How did you git away with cussing :]

    I love this! im a high schooler too.. this happens a lot.. and like u said in the real world too. I think the only thing that you can do better is structure.

    Capitalize each letter in next line example:

    I heard it's whats on the inside that counts
    But I never really had a care
    I wanted beauty in large amounts
    A cute ass and long blonde hair

    oh and by the way... ^thats my favorite stanza! lol that last line is totally me! lol kk... great rhyming and flow you got the beat down perfectly...

    Excellent

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Wow! amazing poem! WOW!!! Your rhyming is really good. Great Use of vocab!
    I hope u weren't really like this, but if so, im glad you've changed!

    ~Steph

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this, the way you wrote about what happens in high school and how you can regret things.
    I liked the imagery you used in this one muchly.

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    Our highschool worked a lot different than most highschool. We were the best school in athletics, but everyone got along well. We had nerds on the football team and basketball team. They were well respected and no one really made fun of anyone. Everything was mixed so well, and it was only the outsiders that caused the trouble.

    It really only takes one person to stand up and change, before others follow, but the thing is. Most people are afraid to be different. But the truth is, I'd rather be different than the same as most people.

    Good poem man, makes me think back.. You're not quite the jerk you make yourself out to be. At least you've realized your mistakes.

  • 10 years ago

    by My Mistakes

    Great poem

  • 10 years ago

    by Bryan

    I like this, it reminds me of freestyle. 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by john graver

    Another very good write. i can relate to this one. sounds like me in my football days. but how true when you get older you realize society is still full of clicks.

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Oh this is so true . I`ve never read a poem about this topic, with the whole varsity and all . I loved how you put it all together . I`m impressed . Yur an ah`mazing writer[:
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is definately one of my favorite poems on this website. It is so true and the way you wrote about it gave me such a clue as to what some guys think of it. Thank you for writing this poem. You are an amazing poet, keep up the awesome work. 5/5