Comments : Ivory Black

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow!
    This is my favourite ever of your's.
    It was just amazing, it blew me away when I read this.
    Perfect.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow. I loved this poem. The whole time I read it I had this image of this woman with paper colored skin and hair as dark as night reaching into your chest and ripping your heart out.

    The only thing is, you didn't put an apostrophe on love's because "my loves now on parole" isn't gramatically correct without the apostrophe.

    5/5! wonderful poetry. I'm adding you to my favorites list [:

  • 11 years ago

    by Bianca

    That's good i hope you do find your golden love. Always like usual great.

  • 11 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    This poem blew me away . It`s just ah`mazing . I loved the rhyming and the flow was good(: The second stanza ... I loved it . Beautifully written` .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 11 years ago

    by Daniel Rutter

    Nice write!

    Your poems flow so well, and tell the story the way its meant to be told. Definately worth the 5 I'm rating it :)

    -Dan

  • 11 years ago

    by Marinell

    I swear.. this poem is so nice.. you're younger and yet, your poems are much deeper and has more emotions.. basta, ang galing, sobra..
    idol kita.. (you're so good, you're my idol)

  • 11 years ago

    by LovinMyLife

    WOW that was amazing you are soooo good! I love it! thank you for commenting on my poem it means a lot to me!
    Buh-bye!
    Burning~Wings

  • 11 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    This was good. I liked the image of "ivory black" it was an intersting contrast. It flowed well for the most of the poem, just maybe slightly went off track on the very last line.
    I was thinking maybe a comma after "heart" on the third line of the third stanza wouldn't go amiss.
    Overall a good write. Thanks for sharing.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sourav

    I like the ending very much. Very well written.

  • 10 years ago

    by Poetically Speaking

    Wow Karl, that is some read man! The last stanza, once again, is my favorite.

    "As Forever, Ivory Black it bleeds."

    Powerful words. Defiantly 5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    We-owww. Very nice. Sad. Dark. Everything in between...Kinda. Well.. you know what I mean... I hope. >.<

    I liked it.
    Guess you were tellin' the truth when you said you had mad skills with a pencil. =P
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    This was a beautiful and well written poem! Amazing write and and details were awesome. Keep up the great work
    You have some great talent!
    5/5 God Bless

    ~*Tay*~

  • 10 years ago

    by TRAGiC BEAUTY

    "So it can't grow or ever be found,
    As forever, Ivory Black it bleeds."

    These words are beautiful and they have a lot of emotion in one simple couplet! I loved it!
    xoxo

  • 10 years ago

    by IzL

    This is really gud

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This poem is deep with great meaning. You are talented.
    keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by Just That Guy

    Great use of imagery. I'm sure there was a lot of emotion put into this poem. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Capri

    You are just an amazing writer but obvously that goes with out saying, and I agree with bianca and I hope you find your Heart of Gold. Keep up the fantastic writing you're my fav.

  • 10 years ago

    by cuca aShLeY

    I love all the emotion you put into0 your poem....damn its just grear 5/5 :P

  • 10 years ago

    by Rona

    Wow! That was great! I loved how you wrote this poem. I could sense sadness and yet triumph at the end. Great job!
    5/5

    Thanks for commenting on my recent poem. I really appreciated it! And I took your advice =p

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    I like the imagery in this poem. Very good flow and rhyme. 5/5