Comments : Make Me Perfect {Kyrielle Sonnet}

  • 10 years ago

    by Michelle

    Oh my god that was beautiful i loved it..

  • 10 years ago

    by Bryan

    I love kyrielles and this is a very good poem babe, great flow and structure, love the story behind it and it is flawless, another very good poem, 5/5!!! keep it up babe.

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    I like the repetation in this ie adds alot to the poem. Great job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Hehe.. I like it. I loooooooooove your poems. You make rhyming and writing poetry look so easy.. I looked at your explianation of the Kryielle Sonnet .. and my brain went "duhhhh" lol.. I liked that last part 'AabB'.. it made more sense .. lol

    You have a great imagination. You really are a really talented poet. I love it how you emphazie things.. repeating.. it really drills it in. You did a great job on this.

    Excellent

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    One word: yikes! That was utterly amazing. The repitition is fantastic. This is definitely a favourite of mine. Great work.

  • 10 years ago

    by XxsilencedxX

    I loved this poem!! and I loved how it repeated itself, that makes the flow of it that much better keep it up!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Tess Tjasink

    Jeez! that was awsom... i wish i could make my peoms flow like that!! any tips?? haha kidding... keep up the good work you def have a talent!!

    xox

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    I love it.. this is a really amazing poem.. and i love the title.. nice job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    +.+ I love the make me, and perfect too :) +.+

  • 10 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #3:
    No I loved the repetition too! It really emphasized the point you were trying to make and it worked really well! Again...so talented! heehee....keep up the amazing work! :)
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    Sometimes repititon works, sometimes it doesn't. here you've used it very effectively and it only makes ur point that much stronger, i think u have real talent!
    i also enjoyed the clever structure and format of the poem, well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Bridget

    I loved that! it was really good (of course!).. i too loved how you repeated 'make me' and 'perfect', and how you repeated that same line at the end of every stanza made the poem so much more gripping. I think it's amazing how you know so many styles of poetry, I can see you've really researched about poetry. That was an awesome poem 5/5 :)

  • 10 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Woah good job. i love the poem. the title draws you in. its so good. great job. you did an amazing job. you have major tallent. keep it up. im def going to keep reading. great job

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Another favourite of mine would be this one.
    The repetiton worked really well, and the first line had me completely hooked.
    I didn't want it to end, but I wasn't disappointed when it did.

  • 10 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    *Breathes a breath of fresh air* - I needed that.
    I liked the repetition, it made sense as the title.
    It's nice to see someone being creative with a form too, always good writing practice.
    I loved the idea of being a doll, and a thoughtless crime, I agree.
    This is hard to crit but I will say I stumbled on the third line of the second stanza, maybe the meter dipped there?
    Thanks for sharing. I'll add you to my favs.