Hehe.. I like it. I loooooooooove your poems. You make rhyming and writing poetry look so easy.. I looked at your explianation of the Kryielle Sonnet .. and my brain went "duhhhh" lol.. I liked that last part 'AabB'.. it made more sense .. lol
You have a great imagination. You really are a really talented poet. I love it how you emphazie things.. repeating.. it really drills it in. You did a great job on this.
Sometimes repititon works, sometimes it doesn't. here you've used it very effectively and it only makes ur point that much stronger, i think u have real talent!
i also enjoyed the clever structure and format of the poem, well done
I loved that! it was really good (of course!).. i too loved how you repeated 'make me' and 'perfect', and how you repeated that same line at the end of every stanza made the poem so much more gripping. I think it's amazing how you know so many styles of poetry, I can see you've really researched about poetry. That was an awesome poem 5/5 :)
*Breathes a breath of fresh air* - I needed that.
I liked the repetition, it made sense as the title.
It's nice to see someone being creative with a form too, always good writing practice.
I loved the idea of being a doll, and a thoughtless crime, I agree.
This is hard to crit but I will say I stumbled on the third line of the second stanza, maybe the meter dipped there?
Thanks for sharing. I'll add you to my favs.