Hm. Very interesting. I really enjoyed this.
But, you seemed to have forgotten the rhyming half way through the poem; the flowed stayed alright, but the rhyming didn't.
And, may I suggest a few commas and periods? That would also help the flow.
Keep it up, very nicely done.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Wow. it was a beautiful poem. the words itself are just brilliant. however, i think you need to format it a little better. add commas , periods, anf capiltal letters(even though this comment lacks capital letters). I think at one point of the poem you could have made it another stanza.

Beautiful! This poem flowed so well. The length was short, but I think it really worked for this poem. The rhyming confused be because it rhymed in some places and didn't in others. Like the others said I think you need to put some comma's and periods, it would make the poem a lot better. Your use of words was great, ver descriptive. You did a lovely job writing this!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Beautiful poem. It's very unique. It had a really good flow too, until the last few lines I think. Overall it was a wonderful write. 5/5

marcella

Great job!

laura
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Nice one... crisp & sweet...great write up !
good luck
love
amy

I liked it dont get me wrong but I'm not sure it ended correctly nice job thou

This was unusual, but I liked it. Short, but sweet... in a bizarre way.

"is like a picture in it's detail" - 'it's', doesn't need that apostrophe: 'its'.

I could relate to this a lot, as I'm sure many people here could, since it clearly describes the mind of [some] poets. :)